This is my headcanon now.

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Once again reading this amazing story of Dragon Age, I think I have read this story as many times as I played the game which is a lot.

Wade waxing poetically about Sandal's artistry is something I didn't know I needed in my life until now. I'm in literal tears from laughing so much. Thank you!

Morrigan:I refuse to go into that city!

Warden: *Gets laid*

Morrigan: You cannot stop me from going into that city!

Still going strong :) Admittedly, I was initially sceptical of the side story with Aedan. However, I am growing to like it. It adds a naivete to Aedan's character, which is good because so far he seemed flawless. No one in real life is flawless, and so our characters in our stories should reflect this.

Something, which is more personal preference, that you can improve on is your descriptions of the environment. It seems that the characters are almost teleporting from place to place. Descriptions can be tricky, but they serve to paint a picture and involve the readers more and more :)

Still interested to see how it develops :) I miss Alistair's banter haha.

Overall, it is good and to the point. The pacing is still going well, and you have nicely captured each of the characters within a short chapter.

I do want to point out that the fight scene can be improved. When it comes to fight scenes, the way that they are written equally matter.

Short. Concise, and to the point. A hint of distraction. But bold.

Is the typical formula. There is no need to describe things in detail, as that can make the pacing feel awkward and slow. Remember, you are fitting in a fight within the overall narrative that involves other scenes. I hope that makes sense :)

Nice chapter :)

The pacing was good and had a good balance of narrative, action, and dialogue. I do want to point that there is an excess amount of dialogue tags (e.g - he said, she said). They do have their place, but overuse can break the flow of the conversation and take away from the immersion. Something to keep in mind. I do like that you stuck to the main quest if you will, as I remember the Noble Origin had several places we could visit within Highever during the attack. By sticking to the important parts, it become more immersive. Good choice.

My interest is peaked :) I love Dragon Age, and I love Dragon Age FanFiction. I like that you are addressing some of the Cousland backstory, rather than just jumping into the 'Origin' as in the game.

I like that you address the relationship between Cousland and Nan. I am calling him Cousland because it is my first and favourite origin for the game, so I like to keep in neutral knowing that my warden might have experienced something similar to yours. Anyway! Their relationship is sweet. You have pretty swiftly set up how your Warden is as a person too, which I like.

There are a few constructive criticisms that I was hoping to point out :)

1) Character descriptions are a must in my opinion. However, the general pacing and flow of the story can be much more concise if you merge the descriptions with the story, rather than having a separate paragraph for descriptions. For example: Aedan gripped the sword with his bear like hands. This is both narration and a clear picture of what Aedan's hands are like. Huge!

2) When it comes to narration, there is a difference between what I like to call showing and telling. Showing is where authors pain the picture for readers. Telling is where authors describe the picture to readers. Both have their place. But showing is more immersive. For example, the section about the noble banquet. You wrote that, 'Aedan did not hate it completely.'

This is good because it obviously highlights his perception of the event, thus revealing something about his character. However, you are telling me what he thinks. A bit like someone telling me about the process of painting a Mona Lisa, rather than seeing it for myself. It would be far more immersive and captivating if Aedan shows his likes/dislikes through his actions or interactions with other characters. This feels far more natural. Then it becomes less of a story, and more of an experience!

I am keen to see how your tale develops :)

I know this is old already, but damn...I really enjoyed this story.
Often when I replay the game I imagine what state of mind my warden would actually be in after everything hes been through. How he would process the decisions he had to make.
Also your way of connecting game based content with your own creations and tweaks on the past was truly enjoyable and your display of the group and its dynamics was also well done in my opinion.
At some point I actually could not stop reading and was really tired at work the next day because of to a lack of sleep, so for this:
You have my thanks.

Holy crap...I just picked up Dragon Age Origins a week or so ago and came across this fic the other day and plowed through it pretty much to the detriment of everything else. Despite a few typos here and there, this was a fantastic story. Things such as Aedan losing his sense of taste, the background explaining 'why' Aedan became this way and how he's imitating other character, the descent into alchoholism... It was a lot more than I generally expect from fanfiction tbh (and I'm a pretty big fanfic junkie)

I already believed that the Human Noble who romances Morrigan is the most thematically appropriate way to play the game, and this story really brought it to life for me. Thank you for this wonderful rollarcoaster of emotions.

Thank you

So good

I like it

Love the story man, really impressed by the depth and complexity. Loved what you did to tie in your own story elements within a great story, and really bring the characters to life. This fic is the best I have ever read! (and I've read a lot) Hope to see more work from you in the future.

I'm glad I read this.