The thing to me was interresting already, now then! I'm so glad this fic's already finished, so I can read it with no pause! Let's go to the past!

great job

Owesome story i loved it so much

Oh man. I just read the whole thing.

That was amazing. You made everyone so perfect for their characters, the way you described everything, just... Wow

This was awesome. The characters were in character and their physiologies, particularly Kevin's and Devlin's, were explored beautifully. This story made me laugh and cringe with the characters. Thanks for sharing this with the rest of us.

This is a really good story but can u write one with spanking in it

Great story! I enjoyed it immensely, although I have to admit I never pictured Kevin as the kind of militaristic-commander-who-can-mke-you-pee-your-pants-when-he-tries guy he is here. Nonetheless, I loved the story to bits! :)

South Dakota rulz. But it near Rushmore. Go northern corner!

That was awesome!

One thing I want to ask though: I don't get the "unbeatable battle thing". I've heard about it like 'If she wins, I win too' but I don't understand what does it mean. I am afterall a 'foetus' Ahaha. Can you explain it?

Carrying on, I guess I understood the whole plot but honestly, I thought the whole battle against Kev11k was pretty short. It is suppose to be the climax of the whole story and I know battles are hard to portrait so I get why. It's satisfying yet, I didn't really like the fact that Dev and Kenny practically spent more time like 'warning' thier parents about this. Though, the time setting of this story is very short- 24 hours, and 13 chapters in 24 hours is pretty badass. So good job!

One thing I didn't like about the story was that, the way you made the characters speak. I get that you like to use your wide rage of vocabulary but, I don't think anyone in the world would speak like that unless you're like really classy or a smart ass British like Paradox. The way almost all the character speaks is so... Highly educated! Not to mention, so formal! I like having my conversation simple so, yeah.

Overall, I thought the story was great. Too bad you're not a fan of this ship anymore. ;c

This chapter deserved a review. I'm secretly a fan of Kev11k and Gwen. Gives me the excitement. 8'D this was super good. But how the hell did he leave a bruise just by groping her buttocks? Is that even possible? Like really?

That was a little confusing. But I love reading about time-travel. I still don't really get the consept of a wormhole though.

I can't wait to see what's next. 8'D I've always like the whole idea of Kenny and Devlin skipping demensions. I'm even writing one myself! Glad you finished this though, back to to reading.

You're right. I love this. You made Devlin super cool. But I find it weird when Ben's daughter's name is gwenny.

it's funny when you put that he was grounded until the kid was born

it was funny when Devlin and Kenny heard them making out