Dude. I'm crying my eyes out right now. What a heartbreaking yet beautiful ending!

This was such a gripping story! Well done.

I found this very compelling and intense. It was well written and emotionally charged, and dealt well with the challenges of temptation.

Loved it! You captured well the beautiful intertwining of darkness and light Lewis created. Marvelously done.

Teary, not testy. Stupid autocorrect... :-P

It really is 'soon' this time...

I actually felt a little testy at the end of this. I mean, the creepy part was creepy, don't get me wrong... :-P But, it really is a hard thing to be here sometimes, right, where we can't see or hear or touch him (except in other people, as Peter had Edmund, and that's not always so straightforward)...

I do love Lewis's thoughts on the nature of heaven... :-)

So very different and interesting! Thanks for writing...

Ooo...I'm already a bit creeped out, and now there's a little girl. There's nothing worse than little kids and little kid's voices showing up where they shouldn't...gives me the creeps.

This is so unique, and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes...

"You forgave me too." This is probably one of my favorite moments in fan fiction. I really love the way you capture the relationship between Peter and Edmund both here and elsewhere.

This is, like, stupid. Just plain stupid. And CREEPY! You should list it as a horror. It's more creepy than the ones you have listed as horrors. This is a horrible story. Sorry, but it is.

And then everything else happened.

This was sadly beautiful. *weeps*

Okay, I did not see this coming at all. You deserve some claps for surprising me. *claps*

I adored this story, it was so well written and suspenseful and kept me interested all the way through. I especially loved the end. Keep up the great work! :)

What a wonderful story! I love how loyal Edmund was – both to Peter and to Aslan. You really surprised me when they weren’t in Narnia after all :) And I knew there was something wrong with the girl!
You broke my heart when Edmund had to kill Peter and you shattered it into pieces when he actually did.

Dear Son, did you not think I could keep what was Mine?

This is my favorite line!
Thank you for writing such inspiring story and for sharing it with us!
Nicky

And, in this case, Soon fits into that narrow little box that we humans call soon!
Wow.

Love the faith-basis you have in your work. Great descriptions, some really eerie! Please keep writing!