Ok so it wasn't as bad as others said but you definitely need practice. Elena wasn't too terrible until the end. Did she honestly think Stefan wouldn't get mad? Overall it was pretty good. Keep writing.

Amazing and very detailed. :)

If this was real life, I would have punched her in the face, for being such a drama-whore of a bitch. I hate her in the books. Like actually. Luckily, it's not real life, and I love Damon, book and tv series Damon, bc he is sexy as, so I give this story a thumbs up bc of the Damon action.

Seriously though, there's been like no character development of Elena, it's like she's JUST a predictable attention-whore who can't decide what she wants. I think you should have followed the tv series version of her more, because that version has more depth.

#Just Sayin'

This isn't good, sorry dear, and please don't try to write lemons.

loved it silly stefan he doesnt even understand

Just quit. Wow. There is no other advice to give. How old are you, 13? No. Just stop. For the sake of everyone else's ear, please.

is really good are you planing on continue or is just a small story