onumi and ichigow you son of a bitch block me who cares eww bad taste in pairing eww

this fan fiction is poorly written

This is...

In serious need of a Beta.

How many drugs do you take to come up with this? Its funny for half a page then you seem to take even more drugs and... Holy shit! Its too random and not enough substance. This would be a great one shot, you must have a heck of a drive to keep updating.

I just found and read it all, I look forward to seeing the rewrite and I wonder how you plan to carry it out

so you rewriting this? I look forward to the rewrite and I'm glad you aren't taking this down, please message and or update this story when the first chapter of the rewrite is out. your loyal follower.

The ichihime warning would have been nice I personally despise this pairing with ichirukia at a close 2nd so thanks but I couldn't read any further when I found out sorry bye

Not to be rude but your fic is bad.
I have the habit to complete all the fics o read even if they well... Sucks.
And trust me i have read worst fics than yours.
I dont know why i dont want to continue reading it.
Maybe its the ichihime i dont know.
CYA

I love all it all and I can't wait to see what happens.

I'm the Agent of Silence both good and bad. What's bad here is that your story has gone silent and not the way I like. I want you give more chapters and try to add more Bleach Elements in or at Least explain why you aren't focusing on them. No matter what you decide let the next time I review that the Silence I give should be of shock, surprise, admiration for a good chapter(s).

I decided to see what other stories you have and I'm mildy impressed. This story as so much to offer yet I feel that it is missing major plot bunnies do the bleach side. You seem to foucs mostly on sekirei and I thought it should be balanced. I will check this story again after a few more chapters and if I see improvement just like with your pokemon one I will add it to my actual account. before you ask why not just review in my account I refuse because sometimes I give an extremely harsh review that borders along the lines of black flames, so should I ever do that but still like your story it spares feelings because you will never know if it was m eor not

(after reading the first chapter) I don't like the setup much-you'd think proof of the supernatural existing (Shinigami) would change a lot of things. Plus, something about the writing style, maybe the relative lack of description, turns me off the story. It could just be that I usually don't like crack fics, which the first chapter feels like. Anyway, just my impression, sorry if it sounds harsh-people have different tastes after all.

I disappear for a bit and now I find you update like crazy? Maybe I should disappear more often? I mean I love all the chapters. I can't tell you what I like the most but I'm still in pure shock and amazement at all of this. But I can't wait for more. Like I said I might disappear again and when i come back, You will have several more chapters up. I want more, more, more, MORE, MORE, MORE, MORE, MORE AND MORE! You hearing me? I want more!

I'm speechless. You better have more chapters soon. But born Sekirei? Alright out process of elimation from information of previous chapter I would say

Niheru - Reiten and (Yume? Miya? or even Karasuba)
Musubi - Yume (It's obvious!) and (Sainero? Homura? Reiten?)
Ichi - You kind of told this already Mutsu and Uzume
And I lost my train of thought. But I want more.

Perfect, perfect, from the begining to the end. I want to see Niheru and Sano more. They seem great. Though have you and your editor thought of what the discared numberes actual numbers will be? I mean unless you are going to with the idea the number was completely replaced. Also I like the reference to the pokemon story.