This was well written; I wish that you had continued

Hello. I liked this story, and stayed up late reading it.
The last 3 chapters were better than the 1st 3. Once you got into the B-5 world, and stayed with it, your story was more focused.

A really unexpected turn for a 'ship of the line' type story. Well written and inventive.

Great chapter, thing are really moving along now.

Great chapter Update soon

Well...Willow is being so foolish that it's quite frankly astonishing! She has complete trust that the EA Government is doing the right thing by crushing the rebels at Matok that she''ll be trying to convince Xander to go with the Andromeda to bombard them from orbit. Dylan Hunt would never do something so boneheaded unless he absolutely trusted the person who told him, and even then he'd need some pretty good convincing backed up by facts! I remember them going in and destroying that Nova Bomba material making plant, I remember them helping a war criminal to take down a Destopian regime that was slaughtering it's own people with impunity. But doing this? Not even knowing any detail about the war? Alexander, IMO, based on the characters you've amalgamated him from, would more likely stop the EA soldiers from landing then go in guns blazing on a hunch. No, not even a hunch - an impulse of something, not even right or wrong it would seem. Also Willows conviction and determination is so FORCED that it's pathetic really.

Are the protagonists of this story so naive? I ask you again because they are literally being lead by their own noses and it's not even by the Vorlons but by author fiat, you're not doing a great job here ShadowStalker. Just looking back at Generation Unforseen and A Grey Justice, those stories had characters with real motivations, real character defining stuff, while some things like Black Widow Buffy haven't been completely explored those stories flow better. Here? As I said, you're leading the characters by the nose and it's breaking SoD.

Well, while Dawn still has her sights set on Xander, Willow turned up trouble that is going to mean that its time to get things moving. When the Shadows start moving, its not good!

Keep up the great work and please update again soon!

While I greatly enjoy your stories, Shadow Master, and while I realize that I'm a bit late I must still question the prudence of the last POV of this chapter, it quite frankly breaks all Suspension of Disbelief that the crew would be this retarded as to not only going into the stasis array but not knee-capping Joan for tricking them. I simply cannot wrap my hear around the thought process, or lack-there-of of the crew in this situation. Just...acceptance.

I mean, let us review Joan - she shows up, gives them an offer without offering any details, any details at all other than 'We're the good guys, they're the bad guys, fight this WAR for us.' great adventure my eye! This war will stress them to their limits and they will brake, we know it, they aren't emotionless soldiers, they don't even believe in the cause to have the determination to fight this war. They will be changed, likely for the worst in this war and it would be of you to show it.

Oh and, do remember, the LOGICAL speeches the characters give won't work in Babylon 5, unless they're shouting at the top of their lungs their words will fall on deff ears. In Babylon 5 you appeal to the emotional speeches of the main characters, and their shouting. Logic and reason have no place there. But I guess that's part of the reason why it's my favorite TV show. It had character.

I still think this is retarded, but as I said I'm too late to voice opinions when it MIGHT have counted.

Onwards to the next chapter I guess...

Great work!Cant wait for the next chapter!:D

Great story. I decided to branch out and read some different fanfiction story lines, and yours was the first I tried. I usually don't get this lucky.

Great section there, and really enjoyed the way things are coming along, even as things are starting to tense up a bit on B5, while the regular scum and or villains are still tootling along one way or the other, while now I have this idea in my head of Vorlon-Angel, and wondering what hair gel to use in the suit today LOL.

nice

The next chapter has to feature Buffy and Tyr. If they don't kill each other it'll be a miracle.

It is excellent chapter.I look forward to future updates.