It's 2020, and I just read this fanfic for the first time, and then I got here and noticed the last update and GOD DAMNIT! I WAS SO INTO IT! :C

Have Ciel get to FoZ World somehow him be with Roll I think Zero will be happy with either one, both care a lot about him & understand him on some level.

Love the story just have one tiny little minute problem. That is the paring. Zero would likely go for someone like Siesta or my personal favorite Henrietta. Why you may ask? Simple they are both strong willed individuals who want nothing but to accomplish their goals. Siesta wants to do all she can to provide for her family, while Henrietta wants the best for her kingdom and get rid of the injustice that happens in it. Louise is just a little snot nosed bitch who wants to try and prove her worth as a mage, not help other people like Zero has. That’s all I have to say but other than that good Fic.

The story fails, it started fine but now, it's a even more of a mess compared to when other Megamn characters appeared. Yes, I agree Zero keeps on Evolving. It reflects his existence even in gameplay but he's becoming stagnant in this fic. Everyhing just went the same. What is the point of Axl stopping Zero when it would play out just the same as canon. Even Zero wouldn't allow it to end just like that, you just stepped behind the trait you've established for him alongside his core traits. He hated the nobles and their nobility in the fic. When Zero says something he does it, if he said he'll destroy someone he will. It doesn't matter what kind of destruction he'll bring, he'll do so, like destroying tye very thing that made him get pissed with that target like Beatrice's nobility.

Well, gave it a hell of a shot. Overall, it's way too melodramatic. And, appropriately i suppose, Zero's presence has made literally zero actual impact on the plot, which at this point in the story is unacceptable by anyone's measure.

Your character are written to be deliberately and unrealistically dense for the sake of making literally no changes to the canon plot, while also causing angst that shouldnt have ever come to be.

Honestly a bit disappointed because this defintely had a lot of potential, and i do think you did a good job actually writing Zero. But it seems like you deliberately refused to develop the other characters, and even went so far as to make them worse than their canon selves.

Everything in this author note regarding Zero's limitations needed to be briefly explained during the Wardes fight, and expanded upon again later. Zero having an internal monologue musing about it on the ride back to the castle would have good. Expecting your readers to pick up on Zero being gimped because his processor is being overloaded by multiple personalities when you give us literally no clues this is what it's going on is just *asking* for a barrage of complaints.

So Zero is capable of moving faster than can be seen, as shown in the fight with Mott... and yet he just decides to not do that with Wardes? Why? If he moved at the same speed as he used with Mott, Wardes would have been dead before he even made any copies.

And then Zero manages to kill what, twenty or thirty thousand... THOUSAND soldiers, in about five paragraps with a sword (a few minutes of fighting). I fully believe Zero could kill that many people. But time frame and scope of conflict you presented read as if he killed like... two hundred people at best.

Ive gotta say, Zero kinda feels like a ghost in this story. Literally 90% of the words that come out of his mouth are promptly ignored by anyone and everyone in hearing distance. Nothing he says causes any reaction, the characters just keep spouting off their lines from the canon material.

I get the desire to follow the canon route. It's easy, and it can be fun to add twists and turns and occasionally change up a few big moments with whatever cross over character you're writing about. But this... this isnt fun to read. I think you're actually doing a good job writing Zero... but it's a completely wasted effort because of the way you're having the other characters almost completely ignore him in favor of forcing the canon route.

Im going to give this a few more chapters and hope this trend changes.

"Doused in the mild glow, Kirche sat on her bed, with a look of worry on her face. She was wearing nothing but her underwear. One thing was for sure: supported only by her sexy bra, her full breasts were the size of cantaloupes. "

Is... is this a Halloween reference? I literally just finished watching Halloween H20, and LL Cool J's character is a security guard who is also an aspiring erotic literature writer. In the movie he's dictating his plot over the phone to his wife, and says almost *exactly* this, cantalopes included, and gets absolutely roasted by his wife for his terrible writing.

Just wondering if it was an intentional reference or a funny coincidence.

Shame that this has likely been abandoned. It's a really good story

Great story. I was also looking forward to the Tenchi Muyo crossover with Familiar of Zero or with RosarioVampire. Oh well...

And then they were never heard from again...

I've really gotta be careful with what I wish for

Way to tell Wardes what's what Zero.

Zero is such a badass. I really hate Mott.