That was so dark, but yet good story writing!

I'd like another chapter.

I always come back to this story xD. i love this story so much! Please udpate, I'll be checking! I alwYs hoped and prayed for you to come back and it's good to see you alive on ff lol

d-d-did he die? tht was really good and u should more stories like this.

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Oh wow. That was... wow. Insane in an understatement for Aki at that moment. I mean, of ALL of the people she could've shot, of COURSE it was Yusei. That's just cold. He saves her, she kills him.

But that was all very good writing, and it was interesting throughout the whole thing, and it sure kept you reading right up to the end. All good things.

So I would have to say, good job on that. That WAS pretty dark, and the summary just caught me and made me want to read this... just to find out if Yusei actually got shot or not (which he did). Now I'm just wondering if he died or not... But still, great job, and continue with the great work.

well.

here i was sitting here like an idiot thinking, "she's just going to back out like the other stories and have a happy little ending where yusei is all like aki i love you and shes like me too! and they make out.

imagine my surprise.

Brava. Very well done. you have officially made my night. :)

not too dark at all, my dear. it could have very well happened. heaven knows she's done it in the show before.

Yes, this indeed was very dark, but honestly? That Aki went insane wasn't the disturbing part, it was that this AU could have very possibly happened in the series. It's not 'out there' at all that Aki would go insane at that time in her life, and you did a good job of showing how she was still slipping into that insanity. I applaud this monumentally dark and disturbingly accurate fic!

With a tub of jam, DancingQueen21

This was really good. Definetly pretty Dark, which is the reason you didn't want to originaly post it correct? Well, it is indeed Dark ( Akiza going insane, and pointing a gun at everyone, only for her to end up shooting Yusei, will obviously be considered Dark ) but it's not like it was all THAT Dark. It wasen't gory ( which I'm ok w/ actually ) or anything atleast right? :)

Even though this was really good, it leaves a LOT of unanswered questions. 1. Where did Akiza get the gun? 2. What drove her to the point of insanity? 3. Whatprt of the " Yu-Gi-Oh 5Ds " timeline does this take place? 4. Did she mean to shoot Yusei, or was it an accident? 5. What will she do now that she HAS shot Yusei? Just alot of unanswered questions. I'd like to see more! I think that you should have this as prt 1 to a Story-Saga or something. You can have it start-out Dark ( as this is ) and have it get lighter as the Saga progresses. That would work! Especially since it's never verified that Yusei did in-fact die from the gunshot. Just something to ponder.

Anyway good job w/ this, and I look forward to more work fromyou in the future!

-DarkDremora4

Pretty sad and dark, but still good. Correct me if I seem wrong but this seems as if this would be during the times when Akiza was the Black Rose Witch to me but anyway, Continue the good work,

Jayy

Great story! You definetely are great at writing dark stories! And I meant that as a compliment!

Can you please continue this? Please! Do a sequel or a second chapter, or something!

As songfics inspired by Linkin Park songs (normally a set of words inspiring as much faith in me as "OC/Yusei") go, this is pretty dang neat. Too short, to be honest. I'd love to see more.

I love that song! Great story! It helps that I was listening to the song when I read this. Lol! :) I so love Linkin Park. Though I'm not a fangirl. I just like the music. It … brings… the… INNER… ME… OUT! ESPECIALLY … NUMB… I'M … NOT … EMO…

I love that song! Great story! It helps that I was listening to the song when I read this. Lol

story has been well written and would like it but it's to dark for my liking

Are you going to write a second part to this?