I know it’s about Broken Faith but he so imo

Dude. I was so close to crying. If I wasnt tired and hadnt just finished watching a comedy movie, I would have for sure

Please use "he's" when necessary rather than continuing to use his in the wrong places. It's really basic stuff, and I'm pretty sure you have learned about it in school. That's just one of the many minor problems so far.

What the heck? I still don't get why this Chao person keeps saying naruto-jiji. There was no explanation for that that I could see...

The 3 and 1 are backwards here, and a lot of people are making that kind of mistake. The correct way to write that world be

They won't last 1 minute, much less 3 minutes.
It also wasn't quite grammatically correct as it was anyways. Still, pretty good if your new to this kind of thing like you had said.

Dude. Love your author notes at the end. Make it an omake just to make fun of whoever was dating that stuff... If you think it's good enough to use as a joke. I think it would be an exellent joke omake!

What a funny person is right...

Jesus always fan fiction crossover that always try to stunt Naruto’s strength . This contract shit was completely unnecessary and was just probably a way for him to get a harem or a girl . It’s so stupid whenever I watch a fan fiction and they ALWAYS makes naruto weaker. What’s the point of making him stronger then canon naruto just to make him weaker in the crossover, so annoying. And giving him a pony tale making him look like a girl is so god damn gay , like the original hair waist length was fine until you added a pony tail and mentioned that chick could mistake him for a girl. He gets betrayed by Goldman almost everyone he considered close like the 3rd Hokage and once he wakes up, he completely trust the dean. Like I know his kindness wasn’t on bad intentions but it really would have made sense for him to ATLEAST be mindful that these people can betray him considering that he was betrayed.

good story ruined by harema

pls hair cut

I know it's a little late to comment, but hey, I discovered the fic so ...
All that to say that, if your goal is to create an inspiring character who never acts, stop the cross overs, you make them discover the manga and you have the same result, without us having to read a fiction that promises us to see a character that we appreciate in another world.
In my opinion, you made some mistakes, which means that you would not, maybe not to do a cross-over.
1 - Often seen in cross-overs, you only integrate your character in the social side, of the world you "mix", as soon as there is action, you isolate or you ignore it. Basically, if it does not exist, the result is the same, therefore useless.
2 - You find it too powerful, so you limit its powers. So you create a character who has no evolution, he just waiting for his powers come back, and he learns nothing of the new world, so leave him in his world of origin.
One solution to this would have been to take it younger and have it learned rather than wait.
3 - You create interactions between the characters of both worlds but it is rather empty, and finally only the influence is existing not the character itself.

I understand that many author likes the idea of taking a character in another world, as a reader this idea fascinates me, but most of his unable to harmonize their creation, either he neglects the MC or he neglects the new world, it's some frustrating.
For your part I would say that trying to neglect neither, you make the two a bit empty, it's better than most but not yet what is expected of a cross over.

Dude Naruto sucks so much ass in this story so far and it’s so fucking annoying to read

Wow more stupid story with Naruto telling everything to fucking strangers

Polyamory is bae

Your an didnt make much sense, youre speaking of harems from 1 very specific view, you didnt actually address the Harem thing overall.

Dont get me wrong, I dislike Harems aswell, they have never been done right in a single story ive read, but Im still well aware of that that has nothing to do with the fact that theres a harem, its to do with the author not being able to write a harem, simple as that.