This was very well written and I have to say I could believe something like this happening because who really knows what all Steve has been through. Stands to reason he could very well still have shrapnel, bullets, ect in old wounds. I really enjoyed reading it.

That was a very sweet and touching story. I think you did an amazing job. I don't know whether or not you got the words right. But its good enough for me:) Nice job once again and keep on writing

Love the tenderness.

Loved the back ground story and friendship!

absolutely brilliant. ;) love this.

This was an enjoyable read. It's difficult to do medial research and even harder to apply it to fiction and you deserve kudos for giving the piece an edge of realism when many wouldn't even if try. I loved the banter between Steve and Danny, you really captured the warmth and care between them.

There was one part of the story that gave me pause::::

Just as Danny was about to call his friend on this latest face, Dr. Keola turns to him and asks, "Commander, were you aware that you have shrapnel in your back?"

A barely there shake of his head and a meek, "I wasn't sure," was Steve's reply. He shoots Danny a dismayed look. "The details are classified, Doctor, but I can tell you that at the time of the injury, there was no time to check for, let alone remove, all potential fragments. By the time the mission was over, my back felt fine and I didn't think there were any fragments or anything else to worry about."

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I'm sure you had this for the advancement of the plot, but there is no way that Steve would not have gotten a full physical after that mission. The idea that it would have been forgotten is kind of ridiculous. I'm not trying to be mean, but there is this falsity in fandom that Steve would 'ignore' an injury. It is ingrained in all servicemen to report an injury, that not reporting one would be detrimental to the team.

If I didn't enjoy your writing I would take the time to express this for future stories.

Thanks for the story. Well written, but like you stated, no medical training. MRImetalreally bad outcome. The M in MRI stands for magnetic. MRI have been known to take out old metal fillings right through the cheek. If you ever have the need to confirm anything medical, I can try and help. I am only a RN, but I enjoy you stories on long shifts so I can pay you back by giving out medical advice. Just email me at

thank you again for writing

Debbie, RN

Good Story! Just one thing that you should remember the next time you use a MRI, they emit very strong magnetic fields, using it to scan for metal fragments would cause damage on both machine and patient. It's actually much like putting metal into a microwave...

Great little story!

awe sweet and great story

Nicely done on all fronts. A very believable tale from start to finish. Every nuance just made this story flow.

Mahalo nui loa for this amazing AMAZING story for u and your betta! loved it very much!

Good idea! I enjoyed this story very much! Really liked the way that Steve and Danny bantered back and forth! Thanks for the wonderful read!

Wow! You capture the depth of ßteve and Dannos friendship so well. The banter and the serious moments were equally inviting. It was incredibly well written as I expect it to be from an author of your caliber. Great job my friend. Talk to you soon.

Great story, and beautifully written! Thanks for sharing :)