I like her father!
And now a twin! *_*
not even finish reading it and I'm already regretting not updated for a few years. u_u

interesting start! really captured my attention

Gasp! Are you going to be bringing in Norbert the Nutjob? Are you? Are you? You can't practically shipwreck these two at Hysteria and NOT have Norbert the Nutjob. it's just not done.

Okay, onto the rest of the story. I like SeaSweat so far. I like that they are twins (kind of a neat thing, i think, one going to one tribe, the other to the other). I also like that he seems to be this quiet opposite of her-one note on that, however: You spend a lot of time talking about how quiet and boring he is, one I think showing will do the job just fine.

Once again i like the difference and the contrast between these two tribes. Again, it's really nice culture-building on your part and a testament to you as a writer. Are you writing anything original that would let you create people in such a way?

The interaction between these two teenagers is awesome as well. It makes me wonder just how often they see each other.

How incredibly cool! I like the Shark-baiters and I am pretty sure you made them up for the purpose of this story. I'm beginning to see what you mean by the map messing everything up for you. Yeah, this society needs to be the kind that are right there at the edge of the ocean. Eh, I don't think a lot of people read the book or pay absurd attention to the maps, so I think denail on your part will go a long way. But anywah, the concept of the Shark-Baiters as the male counterpart to the Bog-Burglars is really cool and I love that they have created their own island. It says a lot for them. Great world-building.

But my favorite part of this... automaton. Are you going into steam-punk territory here? I sincerely hope you are.

I don't think I have read a total Camicazi-focused story yet, so yours will probably wind up being the first! I'm getting the impression this is going to be quite book-based... will there be any appearances of Hiccup and the gang? Though it might be better for Camicazi to have her own story entirely instead of being the side-kick. I like the nature of how you are presenting the Bog-Burglars. I'm a little surprised they didn't kill Trader Joe (as I will now be reffering to him as) but women, even barbaric women, apparently do like shopping.

I liked Camicazi's thought process. Still a little attention-lacking, but it shows her determination and courage and desire to be the best, "Ze Great Camicazi". The idea that they must go still something beyond awesome in order to join the tribe is an incredible one and I hope one that winds up as fun.

Wonderful description and writing, as always.

So far, so good! I look forward to chapter 3 :)

brilliant chapter! :D plz update this!

Haha! I'm your first reviewer. I have to say... I'm pretty excited for this story. I do like your stuff, but this seems to be promising me a steampunk adventure of sorts-the title, the descriptions of those contraptions... I do like steampunk, and Camicazi seems to be the perfect heroine for that type of adventure.

The trader, whatever his ysterious name might be, is an intriguing character and full of personality.

I liked Camicazi's thoughts, her relationship with her home and her mother are wonderfully conflicted. She strikes me as restless and you did a great job of conveying for that.

Intriguing beginning, can't wait for more!