Love it

Namikaze / Namakaze, Rasengan / Rasangan, please just don't write these sometimes higher than a kite, like "Heres my ultimate move... just just." or something like that, I see that you think you've written something, but in actuality you haven't.
"So Naruto headed out... He sees Kisame and says 'I won't let you destroy the leaf village, most of all when you're standing in it!'"
Something like that makes no sense, you only get confused when you read half sentences, it is annoying me to no end that you do that bullshit. You can try to get someone that proofreads the chapter. Will help yo' ass out a lot. And also remember that Well is not We'll, We'll We will.
You're You are. These'll These will.

I guess you are not from an English speaking country, and you have not learned it at all, or you're American. Yea your English is completely dogshit, you write like you are on those supplements that increase productivity 10 fold, or you are high on Acid, Weed, LSD and Pillls at the same time.

In the first chapter You mentioned Naruto and Temari doing combination wind techniques. Now you say he only has the rasenshuriken.

Great story.

So far great love the story. I like Hinata and Naruto together. I like the idea of clans seeing Naruto as a trophy husband i hope to read more about this in ur story

I honestly want Karin to help Naruto as they are family. I also hope if it's a girl that she is either Kushina or Gaara's moms name. If it's a boy I hope it's named Minato.

I absolutely loved this story

I hope everyone enjoys his fanfiction there were very few good fanfic I had to start know how to do this one this guy is actually pretty good too bad this and we never the one I read that he's written I know he's got his hands full with bleach but this guy is good fanfic honest he's one of the few that I mentioned that is good when it comes to writing this stuff so please read this fanfiction for this guy it's really well done might be My- cat using Shadow clone Jutsu there goes the price of cat food this week

This was a nice story, and I don't care if you make a sequel or not, but might I recommend making a story that takes place during the 3 years that passed. I know the Epilogue pretty much tells me everything I need to know, but when it comes to a story, I would rather prefer showing rather than telling. So Temari gave birth to Himawari, care to show us? So some people developed relationships in the village, can I see that plaese? What about Squad 11 and the Chunin Exams, were they promoted. These are things that I think would make the story more interesting because we would have seen the things that happen to our characters after the story like the anime or manga. I don't know if this is asking too much, but I would really love to see this stuff actually happen than being told because that ruins a bit of the enjoyment for me. Overall though, nice job. It's not the best story out there, but I believe that people can get some fun and satisfaction out of it, especially for a concept that has been done to death at this point.

4th wall... thank you! threw me off Cuz it didn't happen now it happens semi-regularly it's very humorous! love it and this story! thank ya!

AP Edwards I hope everything is going well for you and your future stories and thank you for writings more stories but as I said before in my mail to you you should Branch out and try Grand Theft Auto V the three alternate and Admissions and I had an idea for wondered alternate ending missions call the time is come I have a theory the hell what happened after the game itself feel like the right into a fanfiction itself if you don't know what I'm talking about play that game Grand Theft Auto V or look it up on the internet different parts of the game and you'll see why I can put the idea let me know what your thoughts are if you want to give it up Branch out or have you have you heard anything Star Wars fanfiction if you have you should really read them this guy's a good over there now like I said I gotta go my cats reacting to scenes from Mortal Kombat we listen carefully you'll hear him say Flawless Victory Johnny Cage wins fatality

This story has good substance. I suggest, however, that you get some one to beta it. It's just really hard to get into the story while constantly stumbling over spelling and grammatical errors. It just loses it's soul somehow.

By the way if you want to have inspiration to write a new Naruto go on the internet and watch Naruto AMV Holding Out for a Hero Linkin Park Numb AMV Naruto Mortal Kombat You Got The Touch Stan Bush Naruto AMV son of a man Naruto AMV from Walt Disney's Tarzan You'll Be in my Heart Another Naruto AMV Faith Hill there you'll be on Naruto AMV diesel list of songs you look up if you want to get inspiration to write new Naruto have a Happy Thanksgiving and no spiking the eggnog just kidding I my cat's got to go to Kitty nip anonymous

Man, Temari really blew that entire situation out of proportion. It isn't like Naruto did that on purpose, he did apologize, and she is the one that had it out in the first place. I also highly doubt that Kushina or Minato did not put up any seals to prevent the windows from being broken anyways.

I guess I can check out this story again