There’s only one last chapter. So sad, i was so tempted to get the Spanish Version and just do a Google translate on it. However, I’m discluraged wth your advise ghat it’s different. I like Nanoha’s role in this story. I hope you can still continue this.

I really like this story. I fijdnit so refreshing and a good way to occupy my time.

Oh wow! I love this story. The description of the murder scene is just spot on. Like wow! Also, it’s amazing how i find their first meetinng so sexy. Love it!

Nice knowing this will get updated in english by someone.

What about "Blue Eyed Demon" fic?

Will that too get ongoing?

thanks for the update and will look forward to Hikari-Fate's work. You got a great translator!

Argh... It has been a long time since Chapter 3 was translated. Is there elope that 4 (and yes all the rest) may get done? It is appreciated your efforts. I find this an interesting story ( almost like a film noir in its - I'll use the word "coarseness" since it is used in the story too - and especially liked this chapter so far.

This is a rather gripping story. Wow. I was glued to my computer the moment I read the first few words to chapter 1. I hope you'll continue with it. It's fantastic!

About 21 chapters cool. _

Another good chapter.

So Fate's mother and sister were the first ones. That must hurt.

I look forward to the next chapter.

Keep up the really good work.

ZR };-

LOL at nanoha and fate.. Its true many are dying and are being rape without notice and none are being helped.. this story is very interesting.. please please update soon...

Hehehe. I was right on one of them.

I'm glad you got a Beta Reader. Go Rogue D! You go girl! _

I look forward to more chapters it's looking good so far.

ZR };-

PS: How many chapters will this be?

dunn dun dun...(sound effects XD) its jail i tell you he did it :P the very name sounds so evil already :)) hmmm nanoha and fate it seems there is love and hate buzzing around you too.. i like how there is mystery going on.. and interesting and unique plot.. anyway please update soon..

Now it's weird for me to review ;D

Thanks for the opportunity of beta-reading and let's hope for the best XD

Thanks for all the compliments...they make me blush and I appreciate them a lot.

See you in the next chapter hehehe

Hm... Well, for the sake of being critical, my only complaint would be that Fate seems a little too hot-headed and anger-prone so far. That last scene with Nanoha just seemed completely out of character, and not really warranted, but aside from that, this story is progressing rather interestingly.

Can't wait for the next installment, keep up the good work!

*dashes to your profile and check*

21 chapters? Nuuuuuuuuu I wanna know what happens next! DDD:

It's only chapter two and I'm so wound up.

Waiting for the next update!

Great job!

This is totally interesting. Period.

Despite you translating it from spanish and it being unbeta-ed, there aren't much errors so you shouldn't worry!

But if it really bothers you then maybe you should find a beta. Just suggesting.