Is this story not going to be finished? It is really good.

You spelled Piplup wrong here, "The little Puplup paused, then quickly turned to stare at the wall."

Poor Yuki, can't wait for them to meet again Phoenix is a badass Torchic XD

Phoenix is so cute glaring at the rude trainer... i almost fall of my chair laughing... when the trainer of Phoenix before Haruka show up you could make he bited by a Mightyena or a Houndoom i could pay for reading that I can't wait for the next chapter XD

they were so close to meeting...poor yuki running. hope they meet soon. Yuki cares for Haruka. smiles. love your story

Its awesome story. Please continue writing. I am looking forward to reading more about Haruka's adventures.

Please continue! I really enjoy your writing. I like phoenix protecting haruka

I don't understand what happened in the end, i love the history, update soon.

That f*cking Male bitch, if i was Haruka i could call the police or the League and i better not talk about it now.

Poor Zu, Phoenix is very competitive, XD Update soon.

"She's probably on the toilet, havin' a cry or somethin'," one of the other boys said as he rested his elbows on the table. "Girls do that crap."

Too true.

Anyways, I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry, I'm kind of choking on mixed emotions here: your character is a hilarious satire and I enjoyed her low IQ and her cute hotness a lot. Your writing is very professional and you use clauses very well. So all in all, this is a great satire and it was quite funny!

Lol
The storys is pretty good and I personally like it.
Please update soon

I like it a lot and can't wait for Yuki/Brenden to show up in person.

Although I'm not used to the japanese names for cities and towns, your discriptions make it easy enough to follow. Good job

This is so good , I accually enjoy it , is a good story and I do want to see this to the finale , but can you please change the names of the towns in English , because is quite tiring to go from here to a blog to just look the towns name :D , but all in all i really enjoy this so keep it up!

I really like what you did with this social network. It makes this world feel closer to ours, particularly since this is a story on the internet.

Pfff. Right in the Pokéballs. That's hilarious! It's also funny how Senri and Yuki were saying pretty much the same thing. Seems they have a bit more in common than Yuki might care to admit, given the circumstances.

The scenes of Yuki and Haruka chatting was very adorable. I can see why she's trying so hard to catch him. I hope to see more of these two interacting. I'm also looking forward to see what kind of trouble Haruka will get into, or save Yuki from, on Route 117.

It also seems Haruka isn't the only one trying to downplay being in a dangerous situation. The call from Route 117 also served as a reminder that this world is filled with VERY dangerous creatures. I'm glad you made sure to show that, particularly in a way that hits home with our main protagonist.

Haruka's first encounter with Team Magma was just as funny as her first encounter with Team Aqua. It just so fits her casual attitude towards her journey, and Phoenix was very good at protecting her. It was a nice contrast to the more serious tone shift of Yuki's call from Route 117. You do an excellent job of balancing serious drama with levity. I look forward to reading more.