that was great keep the chapters coming

Sorry this got fucking stupid. You’ll poke your eye out? Are you kidding? They are ninja you damned moron. This writer is an idiot.

Idiocy. Stupidity. Pandering to retarded pride.

I was saying it on my head before I read this and I nearly screamed, in my head I was saying if Naruto wears a short kimono he’s The Baddest Bitch.

Bene bene vediamo che succede!

you had to put an avengers reference in this book!

Why'd she tell him to stop when he wanted to turn into a bird? "that takes a lot of chakra"... Essentially naruto has UNLIMITED chakra (between his uzumaki heritage and the kyuubi) so who cares?.. AGAIN, NOT HUMAN... The canon took a loooong time to cover this and then in EVERY fight essentially GIMPED him over and over... I THOUGHT fanfiction would do better... I guess not.

I always thought the akutski were a PRETTY STUPID IDEA as well.. I mean, if it only takes TWO ninja to be BETTER then the jinchuriki? What's the point of making them? They aren't really a detriment to war or STUPIDLY powerful, if TWO ninja can take them out! Why doesn't the akutski just CONQUER the world? It would seem a lot less convoluted... and apparently they HAVE the power. (see? It makes no sense) Also it never made sense how they got together.. I mean kisamie Just wants to fight.. So a time of peace, would by defination mean NO MORE FIGHTS... Kakazu just wants to make money... AGAIN, by peace.. NO MORE BOUNTIES... Hidan wants to sacrifice people... AND there would BE NO MORE SACRIFICES ever... dederia and sasori want to make art.. but if they succeed, NO MORE art... So it's kinda confusing how ANY of them wanted to join this club. (again the author just threw a bunch of "monsters" together and added a PATHETIC back-story to make them semi-sympathetic. Without thinking about the LOGICAL problems!)

"Being possessed by a fox" AREN'T THEY FOXES? So being "possessed" by yourself? HOW DOES THAT MAKE SENSE? Seriously, you need to get PAST canon... NO more "human" garbage..Naruto isn't human, never was... WORK FROM THERE... Also how in the HELL did jiraiya come with them... ISN"T he SUPPOSED TO BE KAGE?.. Why would they possibly let the village FALL FURTHER? That ALSO makes no sense...It seems "konoha" has ALREADY fallen! Seriously, put a little more THOUGHT in it!

Asuma remembering his father trying to get her to stop... THAT MAKES NO SENSE... Throw her in jail, execute her, reveal everything... He was a fucking dictator, throw her in jail for... BLINKING WRONG... Or just because HE WANTED TO... Or actually TELL people what she was doing (truth.. *gasp*... but from him it makes sense.. He kept secrets about as well as a sieve keeps water!)

This plot device.. Is tired, old, played out... Number one it doesn't make any sense... Number two, logically it shouldn't be POSSIBLE, Number three NOBODY (even the hokage's) influence lasts THAT LONG.. Number four "no matter how good the pussy" it doesn't make people forget their natures (as in erasing the history of the very symbol they wear... It would be like telling people to forget what the cross means)... Number five... You have NOBODY getting punished... I mean NOBODY... There SHOULD be a LOT of deaths in this one..By fellow villagers! You think people get pissed IRL? Think about if those SAME people had super-powers and were shown they'd been LIED TO and MANIPULATED for years! OMG it would be utter carnage!

That whole "the reason it was hidden, was to protect him" shit, is REALLY played out... IT'S DUMB, and A TOTAL LIE... If you think about it logically, IT MAKES NO SENSE. Why was all of it hidden? To be honest, the entire argument FALLS APART. (how did it protect him? If he WOULD have had the entire village at his back along with two sannin? His entire life, if that's NOT enough protection, then the ninja population would be near ZERO now! Because apparently NOBODY should have kids, EVER!)
AND it really had a very easy-to-see shelf life... I mean the second naruto left the village, OTHER villages could put the pieces together just from looks (not to mention the NAME, CLAN SYMBOL.. etc).. then it just makes konoha look INEPT!

Also please remember sasuke is NOT universally loved... ONLY (and I do mean ONLY) naruto and sakura cared one SHIT about him in canon (why I'm not sure, except the author wanted it that way) nobody gives a crap what happens to him!

I still wonder, if all the ninja KNOW the things you've stated, why don't they kill the civilian council? THEIR CIVILIANS... they don't stand a PRAYER against them... AND they shouldn't exist (NO ninja village is a democracy) PLUS they've done MULTIPLE counts of endangering the village, AND HIGH TREASON! So just "eliminate" them... It's not that tough.

Also if the sharringan was the "BIG BAD" of all doujins.. wouldn't KUMO kinda want to get ahold of them them, even more then the byagyuugan? Wouldn't that have been more important back in the day (yet other then orochi when he was a gennin) nobody has ever even TRIED for sasuke?... Doesn't that seem a bit ODD?

Just like the uchiha swap.. can't be THAT difficult.. they do it like 5-6 times during canon... It's gotta be swap-in, swap out... so WHY WEREN'T these guys hunted MORE? (seems like other villages would want them more then.. just "son of the fourth"...

I get the plot device... But how does it make any sense to banish someone from a clan when their physical characteristics and powers are that clan? Doesn't that make the "cage bird" kinda redundant? I never understood how that particular deterant worked.. I mean AIO has a byakugan.. so it CAN be taken from living hyuuga... So how does that work? just keep them alive, when you rip out their eyes.

Why would kushina even NEED to protect naruto? Other then KONOHA itself, he doesn't need protecting... Seriously they have devolved so bad, actually the ONLY people naruto needs protecting FROM is konoha.. so why not just let it burn?

Naruto appears to every village... He WILL offer protection from the akutski and the coming crisis to all ninja villages, as long as one and ONLY one demand is met, Konoha BURNS TO THE GROUND!... (he saves the ninja way of life... they get their savior... but he's also the destroyer)

So even at the bitter end... THE SPINELESS THIRD TOOK THE COWARD'S WAY OUT! He truly is LOWER THEN TRASH!