It's been a long time since this was written and it appears that fans like me still love this even in 2018. I want to say to the author that this is absolutely amazing as a piece of fiction. The plot theme and character concepts go very well with the kind of things Toriyama sensei comes up with.

Love the story but you ruined it by making video way stronger then she should ever be,

This story is crazy, I never thought a story could make me grin TWICE with holy being a dog and SUNO being videls mother, that blows my mind tbh

Paintball. Rip off or not. I LOVE IT!

This is a amazing and crazy story :)

I luv the part where Trey tells Gohan, "You should see what my mom gets me! Half is completely dorky and the other half will get me in trouble with the police!" I luv the story!

This is a direct quote from there forum of Critics United

Marie Nomad

'Links to the best buffy the vampire stories by gecoma

Archive: Buffy the Vampire Slayer

This is a just list of links to other Buffy stories. I had reviewed it and let them know. He told me that if I don't like it, I don't have to read it. Jerk.'

I posted this in a reply

How dare you spread lies about me, I told you no such thing and would have gladley removed if you had asked. Be warned that myself and hundreds of others are working to get this forum shut down. I recently removed all my M rated stories becuase of you. Jerk.

They then immediately deleted the post and banned me from there forums

Finally, I’m back for chapter two. I found Trey’s comment of Choutsu was rather humourous considering that he looks like a small floating child. I read through this chapter pretty smoothly everything seemed fine. The characters were acting like their normal selves, even with the addition of your OC. But in meantime, try and cut down on some of the character dialogue. There just a bit too much of it in this chapter. But, that could just be me.

Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this. See you next chapter. ~xXKiraUzumakiXx

I know I’ve only read one chapter, but already, this has turned to be a great read. I like the fact that your OC is the son of Tien, who never seems to get enough attention. Your grammar was pretty good, but using the little star symbol instead of italic formatting for thoughts was a bit confusing, but other than, this was great. I look forward to reading more as soon as I can.

Thanks for sharing.

Great story, I really enjoyed it now on to the rest of the stories

I just started this story earlier and I would have to say Goku being a dog is one of the best parts so far.

Great story! I really enjoyed reading it.

i just love your story, but i was wondering...isn't there some rule that you can only use the time chamber thing twice in one lifetime? why would Videl waste that opportunity now?

OMG OMG... I need the second part NOW!

lol

I really liked it! Especially the part with all those Gohans... I couldn't stop dibbling hehe.

So... what's going to happen now? OMG I need to read the other part.

Kisses,

hikaru!

a really fantastic storry