This is so sweet!

I love the strong sibling bond between Trent and Jane both in the show and in your fanfic. You did a great job capturing Trent between his stubbornness, his bitterness, his doubt, and his secret yearnings to be wanted. He's lucky to have such a caring sister like Jane when the rest of the family is so dysfunctional.

I like the overall structure of this work. The pacing was good and so was the grammar. My only suggestions to help improve the story are the one or two lines that could use a little tweaking. "In reality, he wanted to go back in there so badly, almost as badly as he wanted NOT to" could use a revision to make it sound stronger. "...so badly" could be replaced with a better description for Trent's inner clashing. My other tip would be to review wherever you placed the word "weird" and see it you truly need that word or if you could use a synonym that will better convey the same context.

Their mother's butterfly philosophy conflicting with Trent's desires made an interesting read. Considering he's a slacker in the cartoon, he showed uncanny commitment to stay out in a tent for SIX MONTHS. It was so sad to read that the other family members were indifferent to his arrival. You did a nice job portraying that emptiness and Trent's dejection. But Trent returning home in the end made me happy. And it was very captivating that Jane was happy to see him back.

Overall, terrific one shot. Thanks for the great read!

This was so well done! It really captures that bond I always thought Jane and Trent had. Loved it!

Pretty good, pretty good.

Ugh - I was so surprised by that line in the episode (he was just waiting for someone to invite him back in!) that I swear I let out a very odd squeeing noise I never knew I could make... And now to have an entire fic devoted to exploring that line - my poor heart can't take the angst! Haha - well done! D

Really sweet. Thank you!

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This was good. It seems like something that could have been slipped into the show as a flashback of Trent's when he originally mentions how he lived in the tent. Jane Lane is my favourite character from the show, and I always like things that focus on the sibling relationship between her and Trent. Good work.

I love it! Your characterizations seemed right for Trent and Jane at that age. I remember the episode where he said that, and well it was somewhat humorous at the time, thinking about 12 year old Trent sleeping outside in the snow and no one even caring is slightly horrifying.