I liked your story until you made Ron obliviate Rose. I mean what kind of a mad dad does that ?
Also you misspelled ‘stared’ quite a lot of times..but yeah I did enjoy the first few chapters..Good work

Good work! I really enjoyed it.

I like your use of nonlinear storylines.

Lol. You’ve really made great use of the first person POV in this story. And The characters are all very well developed, even the OC ones, which tend to be the weak part of a lot of stories. Excited to get to the rest.

I usually don't do these only for the reason I don't want upset people with something I say wrong but the way you brought the characters to life with their emotions and the reality of their situations I couldn't help but feel every emotion I have for this story and I think that's a fantastic talent that you possess

It's bill who's victorie's father and flours her mum

Nice job! Good luck in all your future endeavors!

Do you like Adele? ;D

This was so lovely I was crying at the end the transition from hatred to love was so sweet and the crying scene really hit me In the heart this was beautiful 3

This is a great story with unexpected twists and turns that again end unexpectedly. I would have fully believed Ron to have obliviated Scorp and Rose if it weren't for the other explanation. This is to say I had a lot of fun reading your story and want to thank you for writing and sharing it.
Thank you, Kimmily

Nice story!

I did not see that coming and I am both super upset and super excited to see how this works out. also I feel like Ron is going to get in some serious trouble for this, I mean like isn't stuff like this illegal?

I think im dead im seriously dead like omg what the hell like omg *throughs brick* how could you ,thats it im done apsaloultly done with fanfiction...(i obvisly gave to jerp reading to see what happend though) but seriously hoe could ge like agggggghhhhhhhh its late and im meant to be asleep and i just scremmed and niw im crying

I also have something to say about the swearing. The Harry Potter style worked out great with some sophisticated language. And yes they swear, but in their own language. It is more like " bloody hippogriph".
And please try to cut down on the spelling and grammer mistakes.
But thank you for building this story.

you are a great writer not every one can write about two people who are perfect for each other I love your writing