Enjoyed the story very much.

This is a really good story! I love every single bit of it! Good job

Hi! This is a great story and you are a wonderful writer. Thanks for writing and posting. I was wondering if you had an actual picture of the Phoenix you described? Or did you come up with it? If you don't have a pic that's fine. Have a spectacular day!

Omg, right there is one thing I need to say- soooo amazing! If you really want to end this one, you could do a separate one for Lilly growing up! That would be awesome! Absolutely loved this story and will read more written by you! :)

This is such an amazing story! Hope that you update soon, but I'm happy if this story were to end here. I really love your work :)

A few comments"
Pachelbel's
In a wedding, a bride goes down the aisle to meet her groom. After
the wedding, the couple comes back up the aisle, and the wedding party after them.
Yeah, I know it can be confusing, but I thought I'd clarify that for you.

Do you mind if I copy some of the sentences with errors, in red, and put the corrected parts back to you?

would it be alright with you if I acted as a beta, whatever that is, and pointed out grammatical and spelling errors? Would that help you be a better writer. Homonyms can be quite tricky, because they sound the same, but have different meanings and spellings. English was my best subject, as was spelling, but every now and then, I misspell words.

still love your story, "The team popped in to say hello to the newest addition to the family." Just thought I'd point that out to you. I, myself like to write stories. I had one in mind about Tony having a long lost sister, named Tonya, and learning that DiNozzo , Sr. was in to some really shady business. Tim's dad the Admiral, was mean to Tim, for not enlisting in the Navy. I called my story "Commiseration" I have no Idea how to fill in all the technical stuff, just Tonya lines. You can e-mail me at . if you're interested

yay! you got the spelling for male fiancé right! Good for you. It's French.

Love your story, but a bit of advice: fiancé is male, and fiancée is female. Just thought you'd liked to know

So happy that they are home safe and sound.

Nice reunion.

I love this story

Cute update. Very nice details.