This was a cute story and I love how Hermione and Draco ended up together. Super sweet...sad about Ron's potion problem tho. I must say I usually hate first person stories but I think you did a fantastic job here! Thanks for sharing.

Lucius the hero! Hahaha

Oh god, that was very intense. Perfect chapter!

What was Draco doing outside her flat?
Why is he allways with Hermione from the beginning of the story? Hmm...
Who is the attacker? Ron?

If Hermione is just feeling butterflies, then H and G shouldn't be able to feel from the outside.

You've got some great ideas here, but I'd love to see an edited version. Slow down the narrative.

There's something here that makes me want to read. I'm struggling with the run-on sentences and comma splices, though. I think there's potential here, though.

(Chortling with glee...) And the weasel gets what's coming to him...nicely done theo, couldn't have done any better myself!

(Sneer) The weasel's has always been deranged, nothing new there...

What happened to Blaise and Cassie?

Great! I want to translate it for Russian fans of Dramione, if you don't mind. May I do it?

I think Ron is giving the threats

Also why does Hermione cry so much? You made her be a ditzy whiner.

I'm sorry, it's a good plot but it goes around and over certain things over and over again. Also, I find myself correcting grammar and punctuation in my head.

This story was incredible! Perfect amounts of romance, humor and drama. I live they way you write all of these characters! The plot is amazing and executed perfectly! If you write a sequel I will absolutely be reading it! Simply amazing! Really great work!