I'd give it 3.5 out of 5 stars so its good but not great. The grammar errors to take away a bit and, at times, it seemed there were sentencesparagraphs/ chapters missing because of how the story jumped from one thing to the next. Despite this, you at least gave them a HEA which no one seems to want to do on this site so that alone got you a star.

Since Wyatt says "come to save Matthew" is it safe to assume that he is already in the pastwas in the past in the first chapter already? Its not really stated in the story-from what I've seen so far although I know from the summary that he does, in fact, go back in time to save Matthew.

Also one other thing was Wyatt just deciding to do a spell and show his memories. Honestly all they asked was what happened to his fiance. He could just ad easily have said "He died/ was killed" and told them. Its not really realistic that the first thing that comes to mind is to go through a memory spell. Although I did like seeing the memories. Because of this, I would only suggest you introduce the spell/memories differently; make it more realistic. For instance, you could add a small paragraph where Wyatt is beyond distraught at even the thought of talking about it, and the sisters really push him to talk, so he gives in by doing the spell. But just going from question to spell makes no sense.

I do have a couple questions though. 1. If he knew chris since kindergarten, shouldn't at least piper have known or met chris before? I mean he's 25 now, thats 19 years of knowing each other and his mom never met him once? 2. if pipers son Matthew is evil, so evil that Wyatt and Chris and others were actually having battles with him, shouldn't piper and the sisters have known Matthew was evil? Or better yet, where were the charmed ones during the battle?

Wow.. First chapter and you already have me crying. I take that as a sign for a good stroy ahead.

It was well worth the read. I love it. Thanks :)

Oh such a good ending!
And yes, i did enjoyed your story...it was really good and i always fallowed it.
I wish you luck with new stories and maybe, if it is a Chris/Wyatt fic (because those story's i usually fallow) then you will have a fallower.
Good luck. You are a good writer.

what a wonderful ending!
Congratlations,it has been a very dramatic and fascinating story,very well written"!

Awe :'(
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I loved it, wait to see you come up with :-)

Oh no, Chris is wounded!
He is not going to die, is he?
UPDATE SOON!

Awesome story,awesome chapter!
Heemthis Gideon honours really his name,he reminds me of another Gideon I used to know...What will happen now to the baby?

I loved it.
Poor chirs, oh wyatt is going to be pissed.
Cant wait for more please please update soon

nice story

Happy belated Thanksgiving,my dear miss Rose!
Now,about the story:it is every minute more interesting,.and you have such a very peotic style for to describe the situations,that I like very very much.
And you manage very well the tension!
Congrtulations,again!

Chris knows the truth.
I wonder what's going to happen next!
UPDATE SOON!