Wow, this story just went to from tolerable to terrible.

Rape, very very poorly addressed.

Attack on Malfoy and co, not objected to by Headmistress nor was the weirdly declared but never accepted 6 on 6 duel. Instead she officiates.

Duel itself was terrible, spells you have preciously described as having specific effects no longer work that way.

The use of wrong words and badly misspelled words is even worse in this chapter than up until now.

I would say thanks for writing, but I will not, as all you really did was waste my time reading your adaptation of sheltie's much better story.

Goodbye.

Ron

Le sigh... ability sheets are so lame. Just kinda kills any intrigue and mystery in a story.

There is a lack of Herbology on his report. It's a mandatory class until O. .

umm, what is going on, this makes no sense anymore. You had a great story then went into a completely different direction. Literally was a good story before this chapter went full on multi crossover. You can do better than that.

Okay then...

Harry should not have to be punished and kicked out of his own residence.

There are a ton of spelling errors in this chapter.

If they are betrothed why do they sleep separately?

It is a good thing I am reading this for the fluff because this story is one of the most cliche ones I have ever read. It's good for a laugh and for fluff tho. Daphne is pretty cute c:

The word SINCE is not spelled like this science. This is a different word science. To help with your spelling try an online dictionary. TRUST ME! Without one you'd be trying to figure what the hell I was trying to say! I read in the college level but spell around third grade.

Why would Harry go for a fucking duel? If he found out Malfoy raped some girl he would of beat him let alone the fact that it was Daphne's sister. And using stunners in the duel really. He acts enraged but still acts like all that happen was a small sxhoolyard fight or something. Work on your ability to portray emotions better or on how to make the actions of your characters match their words and emotions.

Why is Harry so insistent on being friends with Ron again?

Why doesn't Harry have him arrested? Or just kill him, he already plans on killing death eaters anyway.

Great job

What a pathetic looser you are. The one with a hollow space in his head is yiu, thats why you are an unemployed single looser who writes bullshit Harry Stue Harem Storys on the internet.