Needs spacing mate

paragraphs?

you should make naruto a little more serious and stronger not godlike but stronger and make where he's not so loud and embarrasses him self and get him some new clothes

This would be a good read if you separated it out into paragraphs and used quotation marks or apostrophes for dialog.

Nice work
JDCXVII

update this is a good story PLEASE UPDATE!

Naruto and Naeuko keep bonding more and more!

Please please please continue this story since there are very few GOOD Naruto and Naruko stories where they love each other!

I hope you continue this fic it's very good trust me

Do You seriously not understand english composition. sentences are grouped into paragraphs which are divided by get this... hitting the enter key, yeah that thing two buttons over from the pinky at rest on home row, sort of long has an arrow on it.

Then another amazying thing, if you hit the shift key and then the ' key (which is right next to the resting pinky) then you get ". if you put a bunch of text in between to of these like "..." then it means speaking (grandted my example actually represents continued silence but we can talk about that latter.)

Seriously, fix it, far as i can tell their is nothing seriously wrong with your story or writing style except the fact that no one should even attempt to wade through your somehow illegible typing.

Dear God, MY EYES! Might want to fix that wall of text, space it out into paragraphs, put in "" and '' for talking and thinking respectively.

If your just going to write for yourself an ignor eveyones reviews then don't put it up for others to see.

MY EYES!

I'm not going to hate on you because I like this FF but could you please use paragraphs and " and ' to help identify if some one is talking or thinking please other than that keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to the rest of this!

YOU LIKE INCEST TOO

GO FIGURE

Ohhhh my eyes!What the fuck man use bloody paragraphs would you?Oh my God my eyes are bleeding!Anyway , use " " for when someone talks and ' ' for when someone my God have I told you that my eyes hurt from reading this?I don't think I've stressed it enough...Also, try to improve on the dialogue , it seems stressed and Christ my eyes...oh my beautiful eyes... I hope you're happy...I am not...Moving on , please try to put some spice into the story.I mean don't just use the original canon dialogue , we've read that shit a hundred times over...*sigh*

Ending , try to make the characters seem more some research on them , study their character , you know what I mean.

Try to overall improve your writing style...Or if you don't want to just keep writing this shit(not trying to offend you).In the end it's your decision how you'll spend your time...right?

Oh my fucking God my eyes hurt and it's your fault!

great chapter i can't wait for the next update.