AWESOME STORY! I love how you expanded on the romance between Hawke and Sebastian! Sebastian is great in the game, but it was a little upsetting the romance with him is so...chaste...but it's still sweet all the same! Great job! :)

SOOO LONG! but a great story none the less. _

Sweet story, made me smile :)
*goes to look and see if you've written anything that follows on from this*

This story reminds me of just how much I love the Fem!Hawke/Sebastian pairing. I love the internal conflict that Sebastian experiences, and how he's somewhat clueless about his true feelings towards Hawke. I also like how you portrayed Hawke, making her a strong character but still likeable. I'm not a fan of Mary Sues, and too often I see Hawke written as one. Thanks for sharing this!

I loved this story, I thought maybe it started off slow but it really showed the evolving romance of hawk and sebastian very well. :) great job! If only the actual game were this way...

This is a really good story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. I particularly liked the little smattering of Gaelic that Sebastian uses. Fantastic work.

"Bethany wasn't a blood mage but the Templars considered her to be an apostate."

I just want to correct this, Bethany IS an apostate (so is Hawke if he/she is a mage). Any mage outside of the Circle or fled from the Circle is considered an apostate. Same with Anders. Being an apostate does not make you a blood mage.

Hopefully that helps.

Anyway, this could be the longest one shot I've read. I enjoyed it. Hope you write more SebastianxHawke.