amazing story 10/10

Nice read. You made some good imagery in there, and a fun scenario.

Pretty decent short I especially loved the line ‘There is no way she likes it only because they are just too cute. It’s like saying I enjoy bathing in the blood of my enemy only because the color is just so appealing.’ Their behavior while drunk was quite realistic and his reaction the morning after was entertaining and left me curious to find out how Kirino would handle this development.

This was good stuff dude. Though I would think that a wine bottle would be recognizable even in a different language. Oh well. It was nice and angsty without going too far like most do. Also it was properly incoherent, because drunkeness, and felt like something that could happen, good work. As a final note, you misspelled pantry at one point so it read "As I looked at the ingredients in the panties..." I found this hilarious.

So Jell-O of Kyousuke right now. I guess luck have a way of picking people...

Aside from a few typos, grammar errors and the like it was pretty, btw was the original taken down? Doesn't make much sense if this is supposed to be a prelude.

correction:
too use - too used
panties - pantry

I like this pairing a great deal. I'm glad to find a fic that takes their relationship to the next level. I also enjoy that this was written in first person as it was reminiscent of the original novels. However I feel that you made kirino far too passive here! I think she would play a much larger role in her first sexual experience than just allowing herself to be pounded into the bed. I think kirino would be naturally just as curious and interested in the experience as kyousuke, even if intoxicated. The kirino we know from the series has way too much personality to play such bland role during sex. Also, I'm terribly sick of the "massive blood loss virginity thing" in fanfics. If she was turned on (which it seemed she was to some degree), there would not be a "puddle of blood" unless she were on her period at the time. Not all virgins bleed, and bleeding during sex is a very bad sign. It means the hymen is torn and not just stretched. Tearing the hymen is NOT supposed to happen during sex unless it's a completely dry entrance or there was force. If kyousuke was gentle (and knowing his character I think he would be albeit somewhat clumsy) there is no way kirino would bleed that way. Anyway the more you know and all that coming from someone with a vagina.

I would be interested in a continuation as well.

I like it keep it up

You're IN!

Er...this was awkward point of view you had there...interesting but you need more descriptive lexis there to spice things up...

Otherwise it was good though rather like a beginner but we all start somewhere...

...besides I applaud you for the taboo!
Stupid morals disgrace everything...Chet!

Just for the record when hes making dinner you said he checked the panties for food and you probably meant pantry loll

This was a really interesting read. My favorite part has got to be the ending and Kyousuke's reaction when waking up. That is also the reason to why I'd love to see a part 2. Entirely up to you wether you want to or not but I hope you will.
Keep up the good work, my friend.

I LOVE IT! you should write a part 2 or one that tells what happens next. please?

Wow I think I should consider myself disgusting and freaky, since I'm really into incest, examples are Oreimo and the Kagamines "twin". I have to agree, the anime did not satisfy me, it disappointed me in fact, even though I have to admit it was a lovely series. I don't know, I just have mixed feelings. And I can't believe I just started to read this fic, your writing made me feel like I'm drunk too. Love the lemon!

Niceeeee! But I wanted to be this story a little bit detailed :