Please update soon!

I think it will be cool if Bambi turns out to be Aro's mate. I think that would be interesting.

WOW.

i really like renata and the ayala? I think thats how u spell it.

PLease continue :D

Nice

Argh you can't leave it there! Please please update soon

please update

That's so scary! Caius, right? Tsk, that's bad news.

Update soon! Waiting in anticipation at whose voice that was although I have an idea.

Nice story. Update soon

when will you continua? xxxxx

Please update more often. I love this fanfic! :D :D

I'm liking the flow of this story so far. Can't wait for the next chapter!

oooh, very intriguing indeed :) cant wait for more

love it!

Hi! Hi!

Well it's rather sad for me that the Cullens aren't included because I absolutely love Em, but that doesn't mean i likeyour story any less.

I liked how you've given light to some characters that nobody usually bothers with. Introducing Renata was refreshing.

Choppy...Hmmm. Well choppy is when you scatter the one thought or use unneeded oxymoron on a paragraph, it confuses a reader that isn't so "in' with the topic.

I have a question wasn't she already informed of Aro's ability in the first chapter? The conflict in the latter part of this paragraph says otherwise. Check on that...

I'm glad that you take constructive criticism well. It will help you on the long run.

Tip, try scanning over your previous chapters before writing the next one, so that you don't repeat something, give a contradicting fact to your previous chapters or forget a detail no matter how small it is. Just run through, it not only does it help with keeping you in track with your story and keeping you aware but also shows you how your writing has improved.

I enjoyed this chapter and I hope the next one would be soon :)