Really awesome work on this story

Good characters, nice rhythm to the writing-and a perk: you used "bemused" correctly. You can't begin to imagine how many people think it's identical to amused.

All around, then, good job. :)

KAWAII!

You really don't know Akane's character do you? You are just like a lot of authors generalizing Akane as senseless violent girl. Have you ever read the manga? Also, Ranma is not as "innocence" as your portray.

You story would have been better, if you did not make the character so extreme, Akane in her violence, Ranma in 'perfect' behavior (doing now wrong, no insulting and picking on others).

I loved this story! Very cute concept and good writing too. :) Kept me interested the whole time.

I would like to point out that it was Jusendo, not Jusenkyo.

Nice work!

Soo cute :D

wow, great story, i've seen all 161 episodes, all of the ova episodes, both the movies, and 18 books. i think this could really be an episode!

Very nice fanfic! I only spotted one typo, but it was still enjoyable to read.

awesome story -

Very good, I really enjoyed your story, as for the OOC isn't the the whole premise of this site to take chracters and stories you love and go in different directions than the original, I hope you write more :)

i honestly liked your story :) the ending was sweet, not in the annoyingly sappy kind of way. well done!

Love the story, you should write a sequel.

It moves kind of quickly, but if you meant it to be a one-shot that kind of makes sense. Some more detail would nice, either way. My critique aside, this is good stuff. Thanks.

The ending came way too suddenly.