Although Chao's appearance took me by surprise, I beg, please continue and finish this! This has high potential! And I love what you did with them all, how they all react with the new Shinobu. :3

Thanks for writing! :D

I love it! Stick with this story! Can't wait for a new chapter.

I can tell this story is gonna be great. You have given this a lot of thought. More than I can say about other author's who pour very little into their stories. Anyway, don't worry about your reader's. If tou are going through a lot of crap, focus on that. We'll still be here waiting for you to upload the next chapter. I love a good Shinobu story. Naru is too overrated to begin with. Cant wait for the next update. Take care my friend.

This story actually piqued my interest quite a bit. I say good job.

Oh? You are going to add her? That is a clever plan.

Oh very good. I like how sweet this story is.

Liking the story so far, and it definitely makes a change to have Shinobu as the main character. Loving the cute and funny interactions between her and Kaolla Su.

I'll check out the rest of the chapters at a later date, and once finished, I will give you a more detailed review. Until then, have fun writing the rest of the story.

~SE

Good job. You did a good job at explaining everything. However, you kind of lost me at the end. I guess it's just because I haven't read 'Negima!'. I suppose it is my fault though.

On a side note, I remembered my password.

I think FFN is having Email problems all over. I use Yahoo and sometimes I don't get anything at all from FFN for a few days. Then a huge mess of email all at once.

I hope life treats you better soon.

I like the chapter.

nice story reallt hopes it will work out for Shinobu she deserves it

Well well well, what do we have here? Potentially something AWESOME and HEARTWARMING.

The time travel concept is pretty cool, although there is one theory that could put an interesting twist on the story: the concept that since time is, in essence, broken and thus would attempt to heal itself by constantly trying to redirect it's flow to the original timeline... Could make this into more of a sci-fi fic tho. Now, on with the review.

I like that you are keeping everyone mostly in check and not going all out intent on making Keitaro getting blown SKY FUCKING HIIIIGH. Immortal or not, that shit is PAINFUL. Also, no remarkable girl-bashing, which is pretty easy to avoid anyway if you are not particularily prejudiced.

Shinobu's sulking at the hot spring immediatly brought to mind her drawn Lucky Star style with only her eyes above water, glaring at Kitsune like she was some sort of a sexual fiend (that she truthfully was then), sort of like a.. an angry, sulking crocodile?

Anyway, keep up the good work! I added this to my story alerts so I'll know if your extraordinary procrastination skills are acting up again :D

like what I have seen so far, more please!

Hi

This is my first time being on this site (it takes me ages to discover anything, really...) and I really love your story :)

Shinobu is my second favorite character (after Nyamo, that is), and I really like what you've done with her story :)

Your description of Su's invention is also really... Su :P

Keep up with he good work :)

Pleeeeeease update soon, I realy like this story I would like to be able to continue reading it soon, I understand that these chapters take a long time to write but please at least give us some indication as to when the next chapter will likely be ready.

Quite a good story so far and the only thing I request is that you do not end this in a It was all a Dream kind of way cuz that would seriously suck to say the least. Can't tell you how many good stories I've read that were ultimately stained with that ending but you wouldn't do something like that. Of course not right?