This was a beautiful yet sad piece of writing that I really enjoyed reading. It seemed rushed but I guess that was the point since it was a 'dream'.

The only real problem that jumped out at me was this line:

"Jack was warm, solid in his arms, sky blue eyes looking up at him just like Damien remember them; full of life and emotions that even his memories had never been able to fully replicate."

I believe it should be Damien remembered, not Damien remember.

Besides that this was a wonderful story to read. Nice work. :)

LOVE IT ! and loved the part at the end with breakeven !

Great :)

I I owned it jack wouldn't have died either. Eric might have... And zoey... And Aphrodite might be ruler of the world... But I digress ;)

D:

I'm reliving the scene again... in Awakened. Poor, poor Jack. And poor, poooor Damien. I just can't believe they let that happen...

This was so well written! Good job. :)

This is very cute. I love the couple and I really can't think of any criticisms :D

-Annie

That was really good! :) Except, i don't ever think of Jack calling Damien 'baby'. But, this is your vision and i respect that... So, yeah. Great job :)