Not bad. All the grammar issues and a few inconsistent moments keep it from being great, but not bad.

Oh good, you did catch the 'oops' about Sesshomaru's demon status in the last chapter, though, even being an 'oops' and saying sorry wouldn't stop Sesshomaru from trying to end you for that. Lol. O:D

Um, if Sesshomaru could come out of the story, he would give you a VERY slow and VEERY painful death. Sesshomaru is a FULL dog demon lord. Inuyasha is the half demon, and Sesshomaru is always calling 'half-breed'. He think Inuyasha's human blood makes him week. Calling him a half demon is a sure way to get killed.

You have the twins being really OOC also. You have their personalities flipped. With their personalities, it should have been Hikaru, not Kaoru, that blew up at her. (Though the twins have NO ROOM to say anything about someone being manipulative.)

omfg! this was soooo freaking cute! I loved this pairing

Awwww so perfect

You told mori sessh was half demon, but he is full demon.

So instead of a sister, haruhi is going to be kagomes daughter in-law mwhahaha

... why didnt she just wear long socks?

Why the hell would she ignore a presence that isnt supposed to be there, that is like the hieghest form of stupidity...

cute ending

OMG OMG OMG HE PROPOSED! YUSS YUUSS THAT WAS A BEAUTIFUL ENDING

Ohhh the mistletoe

Oh that ending was cute!

Such an amazing way to end it I love this story since the beginning!