OK OFF TOPIC BUT- I HAVE A SHIRT THAT SAYS MY PATRONUS IS A GERBIL! I HAVE 3 GERBILS AND OH MAH GODS THIS IS YAYYYYYY
THIS IS THE FIRST TIME ANYONE HAS EVEN MENTIONED THE POSSIBILITY OF A PATRONUS BEING A GERBIL SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
k I'm done now

Brilliant

LOVE IT SO MUCH BEAUTIFUL 33333

A very nice fic! I would like to plaster Marlenes advice on like, every notice board in school! And then there Sirius perfect apology. Lovelylovelylovely

If SOMEONE doesn't stop tearbending RIGHT NOW, I will hurt them!

But siriusly [sorry], I loved this story! Keep it up! :)

Ah I think this chapter got better and better as it went on. The ending was really great, I felt like you were so spot on with Lily's feelings and her reactions in the shrieking shack were so right. I always wondered about the clothes thing with transforming so I thought it was great you mentioned it!

Hey,

I really love how detailed your writing is and that this chapter was so long. Sometimes you had little parts that were a little list-y or like a diary, such as when you said about them going down to dinner and nothing happened and then came back at 7.45, and when you listed Lily going to bed and lying down etc. I think you can get away with not writing about every moment because you write such good detail in your chapters so when you write about nothing happening or just list things it's less interesting and kind of sticks out. I hope that makes sense and doesn't sound rude.

Oh my gosh the note from Dumbledore was just BRILLIANT! I laughed sooo much! Genius! Love it!

I was a little confused by the prank and James' behaviour later on as at first you said he was totally different and didn't prank at all. Of course you address this a bit when Lily's friends asked her to point out a time he'd been silly other than that morning, but I think maybe you could have been less specific about James being totally different at first and then the prank not stick out so much and then it's more of a gradual realisation for Lily.

Looking forward to reading chapter 2 xxx

This was adorable! Great job! :]

This was such a great story

Please write more!

most incredibly beautiful and truly moving story! amazing job (as always!)

loved this story! so sweet !

This was so cute. SO CUTE!

I've always been incredibly interested in Patronuses and thought that they were one of JKR's greatest inventions. So I was extremely pleased to find it the focal point of this romance. What a wonderfully written story! Just reading it made me feel happy inside and the ending - WOW!

Hm, Hestia and Sirius, never thought about that before. :P I'm surprised you didn't make Alice or Frank main characters, since they were offhandedly mentioned a few times in Chapter 1 then completely disappeared. Oh well...

Anyway, wonderful fic. I very much enjoyed reading it - thank you for posting it up!

I generally dislike Lily/James stories that revolve around their patronus or James being animagus, but a few exceptions do exist. This is now one of them.

Well written, not predictable like the rest of them, and all round enjoyable to read.

Keep up the good work,

Noideagirl

Very nice, I really enjoyed reading it. I love how, one way or the other, they're meant for each other.