This was a beautiful moment in their lives. When they are both so fragile and scared. You have captured the emotion perfectly. I love your writing style and it flowed so well. Very good!

VB

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This is a dreamy little oneshot. I actually really like the way you describe their relationship mostly through actions and body language rather than dialogue. It makes me wonder how it might have come off without any dialogue at all, and it fits with your second paragraph about how Sirius can't find the words to make everything better.

On the other hand, the final bit of dialogue that you finally give us is really the best indication that their relationship is more than simply lust, that they have a real conection beyond the physical.

Nicely done!

This was beautiful. Write more of these two please.

Have a cookie, cuz that made me squee

Awww, oh my God, I loved this so much! So sweet and wonderful. Beautifully written :)

I think you've captured it perfectly.

Great build.

Amazing and beautiful! I love it.

Really good! I like the POV and writing style

This is amazing :)