This story was so incredibly well written, u are an a amazing writer

LOVE IT SO MUCH! So cute!

I love it. Aaargh! How can a simple four hours theme would be soo nicely written?! Really, good work!

GAH I love the way she said "I'm leaving" and then "Would you like to come with me?" that was so epically awesome! Can't wait to click next!:)

Lovely, and very in character. Well written, and I love the concept and issue/resolution. Great job!

I think this was adorable! They wat she reviews everything every flight of stairs. Only, i know it's cliche, but i wanted him to go after her, and all that sappy stuff. :3

I really loved this. I thought you had great emotional depth. It's an amazing one shot. However, the last line really just says to me "I'm too prideful to admit I was wrong and say I'm sorry, so here's a super-lame fake apology." I really love everything about this one-shot (it gives me tingles) except that last line.

You need to do this in Scorp's point of view; your writing paired with your creativity would just be phenomenal.

This is lovely.

Amazing!

Awwww! So cute! Love it! You're an amazing author!

I really want to like this story. And to some extent, I do. The problem I have with it is the ending.

So Rose stays up for four hours and is very distraught. Part of what I think is missing in the scenario is why exactly she's so worried and angry. Is Scorpius always on time? Did they have something planned already that he was late for? It doesn't seem so, and in the long scheme of things, Scorpius is right - it's only four hours - and Rose, when she goes off on him, just kind of seems like a bitch.

Also, it seems ridiculous that there is no communication method in the wizarding world that will let Scorpius tell Rose that he'll be late. If there is, this can be built into Scorpius's faults, but you've got to mention it.

The main issue, though, is the 180 Rose does during the last third of the story. During the fight, Rose lists some very legitimate reasons of why she think she and Scorpius are not compatible. Their personalities, the lack of "homeliness," the perceived control - I thought she was right to leave. Sad, yes, but right. And then during the walk down, she changes her mind. What I saw through her introspection wasn't love, or the realization of love, but a classic symptoms of "forgiveness" exhibited by those who are unable to walk away from an abusive relationship. Rose literally made up excuses as she was walking away for why Scorpius didn't do any of the things she wanted him to do. And so it was terrible to read, because you were presenting it as a form of true love, when it really seems like something very different. If this wasn't the case - if their relationship was so good as she reminisced - then why hadn't they talked it out beforehand? It doesn't really make sense. I don't care how "frantic" Scorpius might have seemed - that doesn't mean he actually does love her, or that he'll change his ways.

So yeah. You can spin this story into a tragic type, and I think it'll work well. But as it is now, with the whole "true love" thing - I don't think it's right. As for your last line - I say this kindly - kill your darlings, dear.

Love this! Especially the last line. Rose and Scorpius seem like such a real and true couple. The story was brilliant. Thanks for writing! :)

I'm surprised you already have 50 reviews. Anyways, it's a good start. I hope it gets more interesting :)

so i absolutely love this story and probably read it like twenty times but it waould be toatally awesome if you wrote this in scorpious' pov