I love EVERYTHING about this storyyour stories about Orphen and Cleao! Thank you for sharing your amazing talent in writing and your wonderful imagination. I hope you continue this masterpiece!

Your story building and writing are phenomenal. I'm so glad I found your fic, even so many years later. My love of Orphen has recently been rekindled, and finding anyone who cared for the story is difficult. This story is clearly a work of someone who enjoyed Orphen very much. Thank you for your story, and I hope you one day find it in you to continue. Keep up your amazing writing!

This is so nerve-wracking and captivating. I literally felt chills when he thought there was something behind him.

You've spoiled me, honestly. I watched the first episode of the remake and couldn't help comparing it to your work. I wish someone would make your stories into an anime. Update soon, please!

They are putting out a remake of Orphen & I had to come back & reread this GEM ! I don’t know if you even come back on this page but I hope you continue this story :( it’s really amazing

How many years has it been? lol. I'm still hoping that you finish this. No rush though, and I don't mean that to be sarcastic at all. I swear. It's just not coming out nicely 'cause I suck at writing. Anyway, I just want you to know that even though 6 years (?) have passed, I still come back to this story hoping that you'll finish it one day.

Reviewing once again (though obviously I read all the way through, but since this’ll be the fourth time I’ve reviewed, I have to go back a bit to be able to leave a comment)! I got an itch to start reading this story again, so here I am. It’s so well written with wonderfully characterized characters... it’s truely one of the best fanfictions I’ve ever read. You do an excellent job with the pacing, storytelling, descriptions... it’s poetic and thrilling to read each chapter! Even knowing how it ends, I can’t help but get swept up in your detailed, expressive writing! It’s so well written that it truely rivals published works in terms of detail and character development. And of course the plot is incredibly engaging. You do an excellent job developing the plot and building on what we (the audience) knows and on what the characters know - it’s exciting, heart wrenching, terrifying, and wonderful. It feels well thought out and relevant to the characters. There isn’t a dull moment or any lull in the action or plot.

I hope someday you’ll be able to finish chapter 20. I’m infinitely curious about how things will end. It’s such a fantastic story from the very first word to the very end.

Thank you for the excellent read once again!

Orangepotato

Let it be true. The 20th chapter...
Your writing is superb! Im a recent fan of your work. I used to read Orphen fanfics when the anime selection was one page...Glad to see works as fresh as yours!

Another review from me, haha! :) I saw your note on your profile about wanting to finish tho story and it made me want to read it get again, so I did! And as always, it was wonderfully, beautifully, poetically written! You write the characters so well and the story is told expertly from start to finish! Id imagine you knew what you were going to do to Orphen when you started this story, so while reading this again, I picked up on so many hints towards it! All this foreshadowing! I might have mentioned it before in another review, but you are the master of foreshadowing. One line in specific,O rphen was with Cleo and they'd just encountered the undead (if I'm remembering it correctly, I should've just commented on that chapter, haha!) and they saw the blood wasn't running. It was just thick gooey nastiness. Then, later, Orphen was thinking about how being near Cleo made him crazy, ect, but noted his blood felt like sludge (or something more well written and amazing), and I was like "that's cuz it is, Orphen! That's cuz it is!" And I just let my heart be wrenched with all of the emotional drama that was going on.

Anyways, hopefully you'll finish it up soon! It's such a fantastic story and I very much want to know how it ends! It's too good of a story to not complete eventually. :)

Thanks gain for the wonderful read! I hope to see an update soon! And hopefully life is going well for you! I'm always busy, so I don't wish it on anyone, haha! :)

Update again soon,
Orangepotato

I already wrote a review of this chapter and it won't let me review a second time, but I insist that I have to write another review!

God, I don't know how many times I've reread this even knowing that it is not finished and that you haven't continued writing it for sometime, but it gets me every single time. Every. Single. Time!

Your carefully chosen phrases are absolute poetry. I don't think I could read a published novel that has as the same amount of cleverly crafted wordplay. And when I read each sentence, you fill it with so much tension-seriously, it leaves my stomach churning in anticipation with all the tension. And it's so damn good.

I'm jealous of your ability to write the characters. Without having to say explicitly what both Orphen and Cleo were feeling towards the engagement, you were able to show it, dramatize it, push that tension as far as it could go, and it was layered. Your writing has depth, it's not superficial-for instance: there's a multiplicity to how Cleo is reacting towards her own engagement and how her life is fractured between the life she was born into and the one she has currently with Orphen and Majik. Which could easily be a trope in fiction, but it's not here. It's not a clutch, but an added layer.

God, the tension and anxiety. And from reading this so many times I know that you are setting the tone and setting up the main arch of the story all here in this first chapter.

And finally, so many sentences popped out at me and left me giddy. I'd be hardpressed to highlight all my favourites here, but some lines that for some reason stood out to me were the lines about the subtle brandy on Cleo's breath. It's such an inconsequential thing for Orphen to have noticed, but for me it was like here is Cleo, obviously rich and brandy can be quite the drink of the rich in most cases, and it just subtly highlighted in a way that Cleo also belongs to this whole other world and the fact that her breath was so cutting and jarring to Orphen wasn't just in a sexual way-it accentuated the fact that he hardly wants to think of her as someone belonging to her world of wealth.

I'm rambling and incoherent, but I absolutely love this story even if you don't finish it, but hopefully you come back some day and treat us to some more.

You have got to finish this, please! :'( I don't care when you do it, just please tell me you will.

Did you abandon this story? I really hope not. You're one of my favorite writers because you write so well, and there just aren't a lot of people like you here. I was reading old stories from another fandom and remembered this story. I don't like it when good stories are abandoned. I read everything again, and I remembered why I loved this.

I think out of all the fanfictions I've read that are incomplete, this one is what I really hope would get completed someday the most. Please go back to writing this again.

Reviewing again! I'm just got the light novels for Orphen and wanted to come back and reread this. I don't have to tell you how fantastic your writing is or how amazing your characterizations are, but I will... Because they are.

Fantastic detail and the most accurate, wonderful, beautiful characterizations I've ever read. You truely have a gift and I love how you write!

I saw on your bio that you're still working on the final chapter and it's difficult because you're writing style has changed, but know I speak for everyone when I say that we'd be happy just with you finishing it. I hope you'll get the chance to work on the last chapter and publish it. It's truely one of the best stories I've read, written like a real novel with all the detail and emotion. You're a gifted author and I hope to see the rest of your work soon.

If not, thank you for the wonderful read once again.

Until next time,
Orangepotato

Ps:since I've already reviewed chapter 19, this has to go on chapter 18. But rest assured, I read every amazing, emotional, scary, wonderful chapter.

AJDHFGSK

FINISH IT ALREADY OH MY GOD IT'S BEEN TWO YEARS!
Masterful. Hoooly bejeezus. PleasepleasePLEASE finish it.

I just recently got back into Orphen when I was without the internet at my new apartment and decided to watch the DVDs I own. Then, of course, I had to see if there were any fanfictions... and little did I know that I've already read, but didn't finish, your other Orphen fanfiction (which is amazing and I'll be rereading after I finish this review), when I came across this one.

It's beautifully written, exciting, suspenseful, depressing, gut-wrenching and amazing. You have a masterful storytelling ability and it comes through with this story. You have such a great attention to detail and you're extremely knowable about the world of Orphen, so your added points of reference, spells, details and imagery really capture the series and the characters.

Your characterizations of everyone is expert. Truly top notch. Orphen is written perfectly, which is difficult for a lot of people to do because he's a pretty complex character. I love how you write his internal monologue, how he thinks through things and how he cares about things. The chemistry between Cleo and him is excellent and heart-wrenching, and all the more sad for when they finally do get together, because you have such command of the plot, the next thing we know, Orphen is going to 'sacrifice' himself to save her and everyone else. Cleo is also masterfully written. You take her normally fiery self and you put her in a very different position. Her family is dead, she's been engaged to, essentially, a jerk, and she's struggling between what to do and what to mourn. And yet, you keep her perfectly in character. She's depressed, crying, and doesn't even know if she can cry anymore, but there are things, like Orphen, that can get her acting in a semblance of her former self. We see her strength come through when she's talking to Orphen, and especially now, at the end of this chapter, when she's facing Baltander. She's doing something extremely dangerous to save the person she loves, and that's extremely in-character.

Everyone else follows suit. I enjoy your characterization of Majic. Him being young, bright-eyed, but having grown some since Orphen last saw him. Hartia is as great as ever. His ability to read Orphen and his strong connection to him. Even lesser characters like Bagup and the memories we have of Cleo's sister and mother, all come out wonderfully characterized. And me, having only seen the series, read the manga and read up some on what the novels were about (sadly, I can't read Japanese and there is no translation available for the novels), Cleo's mother is not someone who plays a major roll. So the way you characterize her, in my experience, comes from deduction and the few times she's seen... but you manage to make her an extremely believable character with depth and history. It's truly fantastic. You're truly fantastic.

And the plot... absolutely astounding. This combines some of my favorite things. Horror (aka zombies), action and suspense. You have crafted a beautiful story with many twists and turns, bringing things up and then hiding them away only to reveal them as plot twists later. For example, Orphen being stabbed in the shoulder. Shortly after that happened, I was wondering if he could have been infected that way, especially after we had Cleo's reflection on the event where she'd used the knife previously to stab an infected... but then, that thought went away as other things came up, as Orphen and others believed he was just suffering from a fever because of the healing, and then, BAM! It's thrown right back in your face! He's not sick, he's infected. With such a great command of the story and the flow of the characters, you've crafted something that is remarkable and wonderful.

And your writing, as I've mentioned before, is beautiful and eloquent. You're a master of writing and story telling, and I hope you'll update soon. From your page, I can see that it's still something you're thinking on and working on, though life gets in the way of all great things, doesn't it? I hope that you'll be able to finish this story because it's fantastic and it'd be a shame for it to go unfinished.

What I can tell you is, like many others who reviewed, I was barely able to put this story down long enough to do all the necessary things, like work and sleep. Since it was only nineteen chapters, I tried to pace myself... and that didn't work out too well because I finished it within the week. But hey, I tried.

Hope you're doing well and you'll be able to finish off this wonderful, suspenseful, terrifying and ultimately beautiful story that you've created. I look forward to it.

Oh, and I feel like I rambled, but I just finished reading and haven't taken time to sort through my thoughts, so hopefully this review makes sense. I'm just still shaking from what happened in this chapter...

Till next time,
Orangepotato