Fantástico!
Me Encanto

Un Maravilloso Comienzo a,
Me Encanto

Sorry that last review got cut short.

Don't take this as having a go at you please as you are a good writer and I'm enjoying the story. I don't leave feedback as often as I should and it's a testament to your writing that I felt compelled to do so.

As to suggestions for the comment, off the top of my head

Harry being womaniser as when Ginny get knocked up he's done it to both of them

Harry being sneaky as he had knocked Hermione up without her knowing

All too late now if course

Again in response to your comments.

As to the timeline issue. I think part of the problem is you haven't indicated how long after the final battle that this story started and since you said they had been attending the funerals etc I and others assumed a couple of weeks.

If that timeframe is right then your comment about people assuming that this started in the last twelve days means it must have started while they where on the run of even before that. You however in the story have given the impression that it started at the same time as it did in canon.

Well as much as I am enjoying the story on the whole I feel I have to comment on a couple of things, mainly to do with your author notes as much as the story itself.

Firstly how you keep saying how the canon pairings will be over quickly is very misleading. I've now read ten chapters of the thirty seven and it's still only midweek in the timeframe you have given which is well past a quarter of the story and I will be surprised if it doesn't go well past a third. That is not quick but a significant part of the story. It feels like you are trying to con people into keep reading by keep repeating it.

Second is to do with your comments about the sex between Ron and Hermione. Yes I did date in the nineties, Sex could and did happen fast but that was mostly in casual or new relationships between people who had just met. To me, with how serious and deep Hermione is, it doesn't feel realistic that she would rush into full sexual relations within a week or two with a very close friend who was very important to her, in a relationship that she wanted to last a lifetime. To be honest I think you would have been better if you had left it up to the readers imagination how far there they had gone and made the comment about something else instead of upsetting a lot of your readers.

what is the next story in relation to this story? amazing story and I'd like to keep reading.

Ugh, lost me after this chapter. Sorry, blatant confirmation of Hermione having sex with Ron is just so vile I cant continue even if Harmony is end game.

Godparents are usually selected to be people that are NOT in a relationship. From two different families in case there is the inevitable break in the relationship as well as for the worst case scenario of one of the godparents perishing with the parents.

Tj

Gr

Gi

I know they say you should say nothing at all if you have nothing nice to say, but I don't play by that rule; I just try to be polite. I have nothing nice to say about this story. Hermione would *never* jump into bed with Ron after a mere nine days of being together unless she was drugged to the gills on love potions, in which case I'd be amazed she could function long enough to let herself be essentially raped; she and Harry would *never* sacrifice their true bond to sate deceitful others once they'd learned of its true nature; and I *cannot* abide all these people who *should* have been looking out for them condoning this, let alone Dumbledore not getting thrown straight into Hell for his crimes against them. No, this story is terrible, and I really don't know why you kept trying to defend it.

What can I say... The bond between them is probably the most adorable thing I have ever seen. But at the same time, she's a house elf. What the...!
I don't actually have a problem with her being an elf, but what does it have to do with anything? Why did you start adding new stuff at the one third mark? And why is the one thing I want to see only a little piece of retrospection? I just don't know what to say...

oh no. Please, not Lavender. ANYONE BUT LAVENDER!

Whoah. You got me with this chapter. I was almost ready to put the story down and then you came out with.. All of this.
The fourth year at the Library.
The thought reading.
The Lullaby.
The Nighmares.
It feel like there's so much more to this story than meets the eye.