In response to "Quick Author's note":

It's okay if you don't hate Ashley. I do, but I won't rip your head off.

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"Hold on everyone!" Joker shouted as he pulled out of a sharp dive. The ship shuttered from several detonations as the fighters pursued them.

"Shuttered" means that you close the shutters on a window, from the context i assume you mean "shuddered".

Good chapter, but I think the dialogue between characters were some what short. You should probably build up trust between Ashley and the crew throughout mass effect 3.

Nice job with this.

Well... TIM's plan makes no sense. A barbarian scout ship goes missing near a human colony? I wonder what people will think it was doing? A human scout ship goes missing in the same area? A Batavian battle group attacks the Alliance?

Somehow, I doubt people will be to suspiciod towards the Alliance. And widening the gap between the two races? They're already at a state where the Batavian government pays slavers to raid han colonies, and the Hegemony thinks the Alliance is responsible for blowing up one of their systems. I don't think it can get much wider.

Sanctum this is a really good story. There are not nearly enough post-Arrival stories out there and yours helps fill the gap with class and style. You have a gift for imagining great scenarios and your writing is really good. Keep it up, excited to see where you take this.

I've really enjoyed your story so far. Please continue to write!

You did a perfect job with Tali & Hannah, btw. Well done!

Excellent story. The pace is good. Keep it up.

Wow, dreadnoughts don't have secondary guns?

I never realized quite what that meant. what about braodside guns then? To repel cruisers that is. Bears wondering about doesn't it?

Good writing, I guess having them be branches of one species isn't the only way to explain the astonishing resemblance of humans, Quarians and Asari...

Damn, I even made my Tali in my main series turn semi-human, only retaining pointed ears, blue hair and lavender skin after assimilating levo-amino materials... Not as much variety as could be present here, but to each his own. At least there would be no reason for allergies to levo-amino sperm in my case. I wonder why most people neglect that aspect?

Nice so far !

But you should remove the "Complete" tag(?) !

It can confuse people !

Nice work so far. Just one thing - "sighed explosively" what does that mean?

I really like this story! I'm upset that you don't know when you'll get to work on the next chapter! :(

Keep writing this story! This could turn out to be something GRRRREAT! :]

Nice job, it was pretty nice.

Looking forward to more of your work.

-Sergius

I'm enjoying it so far, just make longer chapters pretty please?

Other than that, keep writing!