| Reviews for I lost a bet |
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  Guest chapter 3 . 7/25/2019 “Alfred san I drugged you" Japan said calmly. you are a calm person and calmly tells something that you drugged them. |
 MadelynTheCompleteWeirdo chapter 5 . 10/28/2017 Canada you pretty much made America a sex doll |
| MadelynTheCompleteWeirdo chapter 1 . 10/28/2017 America is so me. Don't treat me like a lady |
| Guest chapter 2 . 12/3/2016 nope. only cuz' I know that im a perv too! XD |
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/2/2016 Yes. *blushes* yes please continue. |
| merome5life261712 chapter 11 . 5/4/2016 Pls I need more it's soooo kawaiiiiiiiii - (\(~-~)/) |
| sunlessShipper chapter 11 . 11/3/2015 This should be good |
| sunlessShipper chapter 10 . 11/3/2015 This made my day |
| Invisibleamericanburgers chapter 11 . 9/7/2013 This. Is. Awesome. I couldn't stop laughing! |
| xxicexxlostsoul chapter 11 . 8/26/2013 Yay! I love Fem!England! So damn cute! The only thing better is Fem!Canada in my opinion xD |
| Amy Kitty Katz chapter 11 . 8/26/2013 I would suggest adding A LOT more detail. Since its in 3rd person pov so that gives you plenty to work with. Try to get the characters thought and feelings in more. For example: 'Bloody hell. Why did I have to agree Togo to a cross-dressing bar? And dress up as a girl to add to the humiliation!? America. Right. I-I'm just going to protect America. I-It's not like I actually want to see him more. Y-Yeah! Only to protect America! N-Norhing more.' Try to get actions in to. Ex: Poland smirked as England fell for his plan. 'Let's, like, totally go now!' Before England could change his mind, Poland grabbed him firmly by the wrist and literally dragged him out of the room, with a confused America lingering behind. Add more details to America's clothing too. Ex: Today, America walked in wearing a miniskirt and blouse. The blouse had giant ruffled descending across the chest, while small pink sequins fluttered to the bottom hem of the shirt. The color was a lovely shade of light blue, which only made America's eyes shine more. His miniskirt was a dark brown. It was covered in black lace, with flowers dancing all over the skirt. Just try to add more detail. It makes the story much more interesting. And when someone new speaks, make a new paragraph. It just makes everything easier. Great story though! |
| Alex2cool2 chapter 7 . 8/25/2013 Just buy it on E-bay! |
| Alex2cool2 chapter 5 . 8/25/2013 Random ass hockey sticks! Really they really can do that whenever they want! |
| A-Non-Mouse chapter 7 . 7/22/2013 Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiit... What happened to America's copy? |
| forever-sweet chapter 1 . 11/15/2012 XD must not eat and read this at the same time XD |
