Wow. I would have NEVER guessed that English wasn't your native language. Haha. It was really good. I liked how you wrote this. It was simple...unlike most other versions of this particular scene and that made it really enjoyable.

One thing you should fix though (and I mean it really isn't that big of a deal) is when hermione says "lay with me" it should be "lie with me" instead. 'lay' is more along the lines of 'put' whereas 'lie' is more along the lines of 'rest'. And again, ivreally isn't too important. But I hope that helped.

Amazing job! :)

don't beat yourself up, this story was great, I think you'd saw right into Ron's heart that night

It was very sweet super cute! A few errors- peace is supposed to be piece, lay at the end should be lie. But no worries considering english isnt you native language :)