I'm interested to see where this goes.

Lauran is a "smart girl" cause she didnt make eye contact with Bella? LOL, why? Cause Bella is so badass? HAHAHAHA. What a damn joke. This story translates from someone that wants to be desparately desired (probably has low self esteem) and wants to be cool.

For not being a "piece of trash" Bella sure was quick to spout off all the bullshit she could think of to get Jessica to "back down". It was weird and alittle rambly. If it was real I would have been embarrassed for Bella.

"I never saw mike newton the same anymore"

Did that sound right to you? And what is Bella talking about/ shes yelling at Jessica saying that Edward didn't want her but "decided to go with someone who respects herself" Has anyone seen Bella respecting herself? I sure didnt, look what she got up to that very first day in the hallway. Shes a total fucking skank.

That was a really mean thought she had about her dad...she dry heaved? Wow, I would expect that kind of behavior from a Jessica Stanley but not from Bella...but this version of Bella acts nothing like Bella sooooooo. Jessica it is. If Edward could read her mind he would realize that shes exactly like every other idiot girl.

Bellas known Edward like a couple days and "all her love belongs to him"? What a fuckin joke.

ok enough is enough already. Bella is just not this desirable...to anyone. And this really just seems like play pretend not an actual story you can get into. And its hard to read because Bella is so fucking dumb and shes about as classy as a meth addict prostitute.

if they said that they don't burn in the sun then why is Bella asking "what does happen"? Wouldn't you assume that NOTHING happens? Especially since they didn't imply that "something else" happens when they go into sun light.

Now you have Edward sounding like a crazy manwhore. He gets like this when females are at this stage in their cycle...lets be clear here that no where in this chapter did anyone say that he only "Gets this way" for Bella. And if its not just Bella then OMG he must have a fuckton of kids out there.

Why is all of what makes Edward Edward going out the damn window? You have him acting like Mike Newton on Viagra not EDWARD during mating session.

Theres Bella acting like a total whore again...and whats with Edward? He's just being a creep.

I don't like this so far. Bella is waaaay too aware of Edward. Edward this and Edward that, he's looking at me, he never pays that much attention to anything, omg is he looking at me again? Then she's too desperate, clingy, and well, she's acting like a 2 cent hooker.

Why would bella melt when Edward smirked at her? Id be pissed, fucking smirk at me mr smirky smirkerson like you're hot shit. I hate dudes with big egos, very unattractive.

I would love to see where you go with the story. I’m absolutely addicted!

I am so completely addicted to your story. I understand how life is busy. But I love this story, it’s different from what the usual stories are about. I really wish you would continue.