This is good, I really like it!

Please? One more chapter, or two... I don't know, just please write more Roy-is-blind-and-Ed-is-helping-him... please **pouty face**

... a little... ooc? good... grammar...

Aww, so cute!

Wanna continue? It's a freakin awesome story : )

This is really good!. Really well written :D

Uh, to me this seemed a bit too surreal. He gets his sight back by Edward talking to him again? I deem that VERY UNLIKELY. Now the summary too says that it's Edward teaching Roy to see colours again, thats just the ending, the rest of the story was then pretty pointless because it had barely anything to do with Roy not being able to see and I think we saw a bit more of Havoc than Roy. Havoc too was pretty pointless, so I didn't see why we were hearing a lot about Havoc, indeed a bit about Havoc's sister when there wasn't any point in having that, what has that got to do with Roy's blindness? The title says one thing, but the summary says something else, whilst the talking with Havoc about his sister might work with the title, the summary given, Havoc doesn't mean anything.

There was VERY LITTLE thought here and very little was given to us in terms of action, Edward seems to popup out of nowhere in the canteen (what you call cafeteria) though seeing that Roy spots outline with waves was quite interesting, I've heard about that kind of sight before, but at the end the sun seemed to let him see outlines, sun doesn't give any waves that I know of, any that MOVE anyway, UV is just straight downwards and easily stopped by objects. Again, that didn't really make sense to me.

So much to improve! A story with thoughts and action maybe rather than just yabber yabber through the whole thing. Keep it on the summary and title, the talking about Havoc's sister then the sparring with Al and tying Havoc up and the trip to Resembool were completely pointless and wasted a load of words having nothing to do with the plot given at all. If you made the summary fit a bit more with the plot here and with the title, maybe, like how Ed's presence seems to make people better or something, because of how little is mentioned about Ed and Roy and Roy's blindness. Hope that helps!

~Blackie

That was so good! You should totally add another chapter! and could you explain the ending to me a little better? did ed help roy regain his sight, as in roy isn't blind anymore, or did ed just help him remember how to see colors? i really liked this story, it was funny yet serious!

I like this a lot, although the ending is a bit confusing. Another chapter please :)