I’m going to bet Chips Dubbo is going to return in Halo Infinite.

just curious, Is this story dead cause it's been a while and I would rather not get hopeful for a new chapter

Oof... pretty terrible all around.

Just so you're aware, it's 'In Amber Clad'. No idea how you misspelled that since half this story so far is straight rips from Halo.

HEEEEEEEEEEEY. It's been years. Are you still going to continue or what?

GREAT JUST GREAT

Hey are you still alive cause its been 4 years and we are waiting you know.

Love the red vs blue reference

yhinking posture really that kinda dumb and english... come on human shoul,d even be in this fic other than mc

Pretty standard for a Halo/Mass effect cross. Overly generic dailoge is detrimental to overall quality. Shepard is a tricky character to write as s/he can be either a glowing flower or a basterd to everyone, so I really can't judge how they were written.

But other characters just seem forced. Shepard can be meny things, but a cornerstone of their character is being the best the alliance has to offer.
That means no Idiot Ball, even if it seems to be required to push the plot forward. Other characters bad dialogue just tells readers you really don't want to write them, so why bother? You don't "need" extra crew for a simple sweeping job, and just bringing extra NIB's into some potential hot mess is raising all kinds of red flags for Shepherd's competence.

No planning, no assigned duties for when they board, no division of teams, etc... which are all things a Shepard concerned about the efficiency and overall safety of his crew would address. He's literally the vary best humanity had to offer.

Write to a character's strengths, don't let them blend together. Establish this hard and fast, or you end up depending on the reader's willingness to swallow laziness. Which is bad.

It really helps some people fo write up an actual dossier of the characters they plan to include in a story. This is why most stories have a five man band, it's as large as your group can be without each member losing their identity to the whole. Stories with larger groups dedicate chapters to certain groups, example; MC, Shepard, Miranda, Legion and Cortana for one chapter, and another group of Tali, Garres(?), Jack, Mordin and Grunt. This lets you squeeze maximum character development or quality interaction per chapter. GRR Martin does this so that when he kills a character, it actually has an impact on the reader. It also decentralizes the main character's plot driving powers, giving other characters a reason to exist, i.e. plot building.

And in top of all that, you used POV's wrong. MC's POV is still in third person, and last I checked he wasn't a god with deviner powers.

Other than all that, pretty average due to using a rehashed introductory methiod for the chief.

Sorry 'bout all that, but it had to be said.

Solid start, but I might as well address any weaknesses I found.

Overuse of "The" and "Than". Normally not a problem, but the over-saturation really kills the flow of the story. Try and meditate on more creative ways to describe what's happening, it should read more naturally and help increase reader retention.

Most people should not ever, ever try and write out a story in the first person; normally I would commend you for your foresight. But the MC is an Emotionless, cyborg hulk at the best of times and horribly out of character the rest. When writing such a character, first person is actually the best way to go; it let's us, the readers, get into his head and sympathize with his problems and the situations he faces.

The jumping around is jarring, and unless it's important or significant to the plot you could probably cut it out or restructure it to the vary end, after the MC and Cortana take their adorable space nap.

Overall good, and it could readily have it's faults hammered out by any beta reader who deals with space opera stories.

Good on you.

Pleeeeaaassseee update!

You ass-hat!
UP-THE-HELL-DATE!
I swear! Please update!
#***##%&!

Puma I love it red vs blue lol thanks for the ls

I meant I approve of the kasumi and chief relationship

I'm enjoying this, but I'm wondering, how/why is this so similar to The Spartan Effect? Is that intentional or is it just a big coincidence? The events happening are extremely similar and in some cases, even seem like it says the same things in the same situations.