you should add chapters to this

So sweet.

oh my gOD this is the cuTEST thiNG eVER, i lOve this; thaNk yOu.

Awee Sasuke is so sweet and in love with Naruto...wanting to take him on a romantic two week trip to Italy...being so heart broken over the break up...that part when Sasuke nuzzled Naruto was just too cute and Naruto is so caring and cute he obviously loves Sasuke so much..and he's also super adorable and gets fluttered easily which I love... (I love how Sasuke says Love making/making love instead of just sex...3) XD Sasuke just waltzed into Naruto house and got in bed with Naruto..Make him want you' Itachi is such a good boy brother plus he gives great advice...) Sasuke is such a genius using Aki and his best friend Kiba (XD I love both KibaNaru and SasuKiba..) as a way to make Naruto jealous... (XD Itachi blackmailed Naruto into dating Sasuke..) Yay I'm so happy their together publicly and all happy going to Italy for a month! Awee and then Naruto said 'I love you'...This is too adorable I want an Mpreg sequel!

This read like it could have been ripped straight out of the pages of a yaoi manga. It had all the cliches and all the recycled plot points one sees in yaoi after yaoi. I had to quit reading them because I found it all so tiresome so it was not a welcome thing to see all the same stuff in this fic. I found Sasuke to be creepy, possessive, and entitled rather than sexy. (All the hallmarks of a badly written seme.) Who seduces someone by drawing naked pictures of them and then demanding sex? But Naruto was just as bad as Sasuke. He was a pushover, feeble-minded, and too childish to be believable as an adult. (Just your average uke, I guess). How did he, as a teacher, fall into an affair with a student so easily? Throughout the fic, Sasuke played him like a fiddle.

The one part in the story I briefly had some sympathy for them both was when Naruto decided to act like the adult he is and put a stop to the affair. Sasuke's helplessness afterward felt believable for a teenager, so I hoped the story would transition into something more, but it plunged back into cliche garbage as soon as Itachi found out about the affair and decided that Uchiha pride was more important than Sasuke being involved with one of his teachers. I'm sorry but what the fuck? No one dumps an Uchiha? Are you serious? Itachi wasn't just Sasuke's older brother, he was a member of the SCHOOL BOARD. If it was discovered that Itachi not only knew about the affair but also encouraged it, he could lose his position. Just because Sasuke is legal doesn't mean it wouldn't hurt all of their reputations if the fact that Naruto and Sasuke have been fucking (and on school property!) was ever discovered.

Ultimately I didn't care for a single character in this fic, not only because I didn't like how they were written, but also because the story didn't give me anything to care about. There was plenty of sexual tension but very little believable emotion. We were TOLD that Naruto and Sasuke had this great love, but the only aspect of their relationship that we were ever SHOWN was the sexual side. In all their interactions, they were either seducing one another, or about to have sex, or just finishing with sex, or trying to make each other jealous. Where was the actual relationship? The part where they got along well and could also be friends as well as lovers? Being TOLD that Sasuke was a very considerate lover who would carry Naruto into the bath isn't the same as watching him do it. Even their big reunion at the end, which should have been emotional since they could now officially be together, was all about sex and how they could barely keep their hands off of each other. In the end, I felt this was a very superficial relationship based on their dicks rather than their hearts. Sorry, just did not like this fic.

I loved it so much it gave me chills.

Awwwwwww I LUV IT

I really liked it xD

I looooved this and we are both Australian yaaaay :)

:*)

love it

Aww :D:D This was so sweet!

Loved it! So awesome! :D

I really don't think the rating on this needs to be M.

Cool.