Is this a one shot? If its not then plz update because its really good

i really love your story! for some reson i really love thier brother/sister relationship idk why lol please write some more :D

Aw this story was so cute, i hope you make more!

Interesting story :)

this is really good! and Ihave to admit I've NEVER watched this series! I've read the summary and know some tiny bits and the only reason why I'm doing this is because I can't get enough of Lucas Grabeel so I'll probably buy the whole season 1 at some point so I can watch Toby/Lucas XD

but anyway I like this oneshot and I have no idea why I ship these two as well, could be romantically or brother-sister thing, i dunno but you did a GREAT JOB!

Hi! I just read your story and i LOVE it. I know its been a long time since you posted this but i was wondering of you could write and post another Toby/Bay story. This one was fantastic and the only one and im a sucker for brother sister stories since i have 2 brothers. I hope u consider continuing this or make another. It was funny cuz i thought they were gonna kiss a few times. ahh so i hope u reply and let me know your desion. :)

-Awesome

this was so sweet. u should do a sequal of them at the meating

Really sweet yet deep and shows alot of emotion at the same time.

I liked it a lot!, especially the way you captured the characters. I like your writing style as well. Nice work!

Wonderful!

Wonderful!

Congrats on the first story, I made the third because ffic didn't have it on here. I like your story though, it's really good! Do continue soon (:

Hello! This was an outstanding story, and it was an added bonus - for you mostly - that you got to be the first to post!

GOOD PARTS TO IT: I loved this entire story and the detail was amazing - I could clearly picture each scene as it played out in my mind. They were very descriptive and it had nice reference to smaller scenes that happened as past events; they were explained very nicely for people who didn't see it. Something that was a nice little touch was the last scene, where Bay gave Toby the guitars and money! What I didn't expect was, first, Bay to give all of the items to him just like that and do it with her own free will - she doesn't seem like a giving person - and, secondly, I liked but didn't quite expect how Bay basically forced him to go to the gamblers' anonymous group by giving him all of the money and guitars he lost.

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM: There was only one spelling mistake that I found. It was when: "A sudden, almost hesitant, rapping distracted her from her thoughts, and her were drawn away from the canvas and onto the door..." The word 'onto' is supposed to just be 'to'. The grammar and punctuation was excellent.

Overall, fantastic first chapter. Keep up the great writing and I hope to see another chapter up soon!

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Well, it's about flippin' time the site finally adds this great new show into the TV Shows category as I'd asked them to do, twice over. And kudos to you for getting to be the first within said category. _

This was also a pretty interesting story, as well. :)

This was so adorable and awsome. I loved it. You are going to make this a hard section to get a foothold into because of the high quality of your stories. I love the Bay/Toby relationship cuz they still see each other as brother and sister, but since they aren't it's just so different. In the fundraiser episode, I wasn't surprised when Toby's friend asked if Toby would be able to date Bay. At one point I had thought the same thing and then I was like 'no that would be wayyyy to weird'. anywho, I really liked this story a lot and I hope to see more work from you becasue you are very talented. I think you got the connection between them perfectly. I love Toby and I think you should do another Toby story. Or even better-an Emmet/Daphne story because it would be awsome. Even thoguh they aren't together (yet) they're my fav pairing and I keep waiting for Emmet to do something about it. So can I put in a request for an Emmet/Daphne story? Please and thank you!