This is VERY good. You have a firm grasp of Ax as a character, and the prose itself is excellent.

I always wanted to hear Aximilli's opinion on different types of human music (it can't all be bad, right?) Very well done.

Great story Very profound

That was a beautifully-written chapter that really captures the feeling of music and some of its history. You showed an amazing knowledge of songs that you could call upon to support the story, and you did a great job at presenting it all through an Andalite's, specifically Ax's, voice. Bravo!

I did notice one error, possibly. Look for the sentence that has "But this brings me to aspect of music that..." in it. Consider rewording that, because it seems like it's missing a word maybe.

I can see what you were trying to do with the two chapters. Sort of a before and after to Ax's mental state. Very nice concept.

Of course he likes the one that has to do with a Rolling Stone. Nice work, again.

I'm glad you decided to add a second chapter. I love seeing the changes that the years on Earth brought to Ax. Doing it through music was definitely a unique take and I don't think I've ever seen lyrics worked through a story like this where they actually really fit. It's interesting that despite what everyone else thinks, he doesn't feel he's completely measured up to his brother if only because he never could have taken the chance Elfangor did with the morphing cube. Because it wasn't that Elfangor chose to die on Earth, he got shot down. That could have been anybody. What made him unique was what happened afterwards. Reading that section of the first book you'd never have guessed how much of a scandal what he was doing was since he seemed to come to that decision so quickly. I also like that the reason he felt that he had to go was because he didn't think he could retain his Andalite identity by staying and so he was choosing to make that sacrifice and that even after everything he couldn't bring himself to turn his back on what was expected of him.

This really does seem like an alien mentality and it being early on explains that. It's a long, long journey towards Ax ultimately rejecting the Andalite authority and throwing his lot in with the humans. In fact, the first time he meets another Andalite he can't distance himself from the Animorphs fast enough. I do love how he can't help the arrogance even as he's insisting that he's NOT arrogant and how limited his views of what makes someone superior are. He really is just a product of the Andalite propaganda machine at the start, isn't he?

Hmm. The third line was amusing, and I'm not sure if you meant it or not, but I liked the dry humor of "losing a comrade in battle, losing a comrade not in battle."

Having military members not be able to vote seems like it would have some pretty serious consequences during the war when so many people were in the military-and before, when Noorlin (and maybe many others?) joined during peacetime. Though, that might explain Alloran's jadedness of the Electorate...

Hey, this is a really good one-shot! (At least, I'm assuming its a one-shot.) You've got Ax's "voice"/personality and his writing style down well.

However, I would like to point out that Cassie's family is Catholic, so they probably would be praying before meals. I'm not too knowledgeable about Judeism (spelling?), however. Jake's family is Jewish to some small degree, so I don't know if they would pray before a meal or not. I don't remember them praying in any of the books. (Cassie's family prayed at least once, though.)