Awwwwww , this is going to be a good story. I like these stories of tough men being vulnerable with their children. It shows another side to a normally tough character (while giving us something to lol at}.

This was a really great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next

still great

dig it, very nice

This really hits you right in the feels! Please, keep writing strong! Because, unfortunately, I have been struck hard with writer's block. So, write while you can before it gets you! :(

Wonderful job! 3

it was ok but try adding a sister

Haha, the ending really cracked me up in this chapter. xD Cute, little baby Sef chewing on his foot and Darim curious as to why. Poor, poor Altair. Haha.

Awww, this touched my heart! I love Altair being all fatherly and protective. Darim is an adorable toddler to boot!

I remember reading this on my phone, and it wouldn't log my in and I thought I would never see this story again. D:
Anyways, it is amazing. Very kawaii.

This is awesome! XD

Ferrum! I missed you!

Wow, this just made my entire night. You've improved so frickin' much when it comes to commas and whatnot, it's like you're not even the same person! There were only a few errors I found (if you want I could run through this too). It's awesome seeing someone improve like that, 'cause usually if a writer gets criticism they give up or don't listen, but you took it and used it and this chapter is amazing and fldkjgciuhdusdixmzgfdyungcms gdynzngsyu

And let me just say, I got legitimate goosebumps as Altair tried to revive the half-awake Sef. Your writing style and skill- it just shone like a damn sun in this chapter. I literally loved it! This is why this is in my favorites! Keep it up!

Also, according to *adjusts glasses dramatically* meaning-of-names dot com, Sef means "yesterday" in Egyptian. That still fits, I guess, since it took Sef a day to be born, right?

Aww :3 there is so much cuteness!
Love the way you write Altair, you seem to have captured perfectly how he would act as a father and I just loved Darim being all cute and excited at the thought of being a big brother.

Also one other random thing I wanna point out, you write darims age well, if that makes any sense? Because in most fanfics I come across I always tend to find that the writers make child/toddler characters unrealistic in the amount of knowledge they know. For example, making a one year old speak full, lengthy, sophisticated sentences lol. Anyway just wanted to point out that you DON'T do that and that I think you have the whole child writing personality thing down pretty well :D

Looking forward to reading more and I hope my review was in some way encouring for you to write more :)

Please more?

All of this is über cute!

Ooh~ This is such a engaging story. I can't wait to see what you'll do with Sef, his execution, how will you do Altair's turmoil..