Reviews for Loneliness |
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9Jkt2 chapter 1 . 9/3/2018 Veri n1c3gNpst0ri9c |
UMkrW chapter 1 . 9/1/2018 Veri n1c34cWst0ri1a |
Eavenne chapter 1 . 6/7/2013 Nice! Beautiful. |
Edhla chapter 1 . 5/5/2013 This was a poignant and nicely written little fic, and I enjoyed reading it. I did think thought that sometimes less could be more; the lines seemed to tell rather than show, especially here: "Tears would fall uncontrolled from somewhere deep inside calling out for something; something that could fill the lonely shell that was me. Wrapped in loneliness I lived out each day." I'm not sure you needed all of that; it might be more subtle and stronger to show her loneliness and misery rather than just have her telling the reader about it. Anyway, very tightly written, and I enjoyed it. Thank you for writing x |
Izzi89 chapter 1 . 9/7/2011 It's good, A nice simple summery of what happened and it seems quite acurate.. nice work~ |