OMG this is an amazing story! cant wait for the next bit~

Omg i love kisame XD, shark fin soup lol! Serously he is my favorite character XD. Well im loving this so far please update dB

All in all, it's pretty good story so far. These kind of story's get a reputation for obsessive fangirling, terrible writing, and mind-numbing crack but I'm happy to say that, so far, you've avoided a lot of the cliches other writers tend to fall into when they do stories like this. Your character is just like any average teenage girl which is a nice and she's vary easy to relate to. Weather this story actually has a driving plot, I don't know yet but at least it's not just a collection of random crap and inside jokes like ... well, pretty much every story like this, really. I also like how you didn't throw in all the Akasuki at once. It's a nice change and works as a nice build up for later chapters.

Now for the bad stuff. As far as your writing goes, in general it's very good. Very few spelling errors and it's well written but it's gets to be difficult to fallow at times. I suggest not skipping around so much. In the first chapter half the dramatic skips weren't even necessary and skipping over the explanation takes out a fairly important detail in the story. When you have time I suggest filling those in.

Plus, the big, bold words just makes the story look tacky.

Also, I suggest taking out the little faces you have all over chapters 2 & 3. It could just be me, but I find them rather annoying, especially since your writing very good and this story seems, if just a little, more serious then others. They don't really fit the mood and can be replaced by descriptions rather then pictures. There's also some slight OOC with the Akatsuki (Really? Pushed them into a closest?) which was a little disappointing considering their entrance, which was one of the best I've seen until, you know, they go from home invaders threatening to kill them to two punks that can be shoved into a closet by a seventeen year old girl, without a moments notice and be expected to take that like it was nothing. I don't know, just a big change in character there that threw me off. Kind of a appointment's.

Again, it's a really good story. Considering the fangirl fodder I've been sifting through all day, this is a nice change even if it only has a few chapters. Keep up the good work, you've got something good here. I've added this story to my favorites as well as bookmarked it instead of put it on Alert, because I check my bookmarks more then my Alerts.

Haha! Funny! :) Poor Kisame! Throwing up that much must be disgusting. And Itachi's just trying to be peacekeeper. Weeeeeelll... Do Itachi and Kisame make it back to their own world? Cause if they don't... Ah well... :\ Anyway, I really like this. A very creative idea. I love how Janelle keeps bashing the FanFic author. Haha! _ Genius! Well, I've reviewed! I'll be reading your next chapters whether I review or not. Sometimes I don't have time to sit down and write a review out. :) Keep it up!

In Christ,

~ Timber Wolf

I love this story XD Was the Yellow and red cats Deidara and Sasori? It would be cool if it was (which it probably is lol)

And I loved the shark fin soup part XD