But it shows very clearly its immaturity.

A character travels in time - ok that's promising

It has two nationalities - okay, as a person of two nationalities too, I understand the concept (but you represented horribly)

You have a certain amount of time - it makes things interesting

but the rest ... you spoiled your own fic

1º If you make a trip in time, you are in an unknown place, you try to adpatar. Not only in time travel, when you change country, obviously you keep certain characteristics of yourself, but you adapt to the place you go: you do not speak so loud, change language and slang, your attitudes become closer with local people, but there is something institivamelte yours.

2º You clearly do not speak Spanish and this is obvious. If you want to make and use another language, make sure you speak correctly.

3º If your character was born in the USA, having Dominican mother and Irish father, he would have the notion of both languages and no matter how much Spanish is spoken at home, the mother tongue of the character is English. There is no reason for her to say that her main language is Spanish and what an American neighborhood was. Even compared to other neighborhoods, it is common in certain ways to pass through different neighborhoods.

4. Is the character in a strange place, with no allies, no friends, and she simply shrugs and decides to behave as she always behaved? And they all mysteriously run after her because she's incredible? This is clearly a teenage dream of yours that is surreal

5th Persons who speak two or more languages DO NOT behave this way. Search deeper before writing like this. It is not simply: ops I was nervous and I only speak a language, it is difficult to change

4º The girl is 19, the brother died long ago, and he behaves as if they had seen each other two years ago? Inconsistent

5º Medieval musics are very different, and the sound of the guitar also ... would not have been accepted in the medieval world, both the sound, and especially the LETTERS. Seriously, use the series you write as references, or songs of the time.

6º Total and absolute disrepease with the Irish culture of the character's father. Where is Gaelic? The legends

7. Everyone behind the character taking her? Semisusite? Even Uther? When the fabrics of the clothes are different, does the musical instrument differ, way of speaking and acting? Already it would have been expelled or banished

You have been writing, the idea was good ... but frankly you have created one of the worst Mary Sue I've read
And I've been on since 2008

look the story and the premise of the fic is fine

But it shows very clearly its immaturity.

A character travels in time - ok that's promising

It has two nationalities - okay, as a person of two nationalities too, I understand the concept (but you represented horribly)

You have a certain amount of time - it makes things interesting

but the rest ... you spoiled your own fic

1º If you make a trip in time, you are in an unknown place, you try to adpatar. Not only in time travel, when you change country, obviously you keep certain characteristics of yourself, but you adapt to the place you go: you do not speak so loud, change language and slang, your attitudes become closer with local people, but there is something institivamelte yours.

2º You clearly do not speak Spanish and this is obvious. If you want to make and use another language, make sure you speak correctly.

3º If your character was born in the USA, having Dominican mother and Irish father, he would have the notion of both languages and no matter how much Spanish is spoken at home, the mother tongue of the character is English. There is no reason for her to say that her main language is Spanish and what an American neighborhood was. Even compared to other neighborhoods, it is common in certain ways to pass through different neighborhoods.

4. Is the character in a strange place, with no allies, no friends, and she simply shrugs and decides to behave as she always behaved? And they all mysteriously run after her because she's incredible? This is clearly a teenage dream of yours that is surreal

5th Persons who speak two or more languages DO NOT behave this way. Search deeper before writing like this. It is not simply: ops I was nervous and I only speak a language, it is difficult to change

4º The girl is 19, the brother died long ago, and he behaves as if they had seen each other two years ago? Inconsistent

5º Medieval musics are very different, and the sound of the guitar also ... would not have been accepted in the medieval world, both the sound, and especially the LETTERS. Seriously, use the series you write as references, or songs of the time.

6º Total and absolute disrepease with the Irish culture of the character's father. Where is Gaelic? The legends

7. Everyone behind the character taking her? Semisusite? Even Uther? When the fabrics of the clothes are different, does the musical instrument differ, way of speaking and acting? Already it would have been expelled or banished

You have been writing, the idea was good ... but frankly you have created one of the worst Mary Sue I've read
And I've been on since 2008

Loved it!

just starting the story (even if it from a year ago) loving it so far and more so that your character is Latina living in a Dominican region of the states, but more the fact that you mention her as a Boricua (Puertorican) princess! I'm Boricua so it makes me really happy! Latin s and Boricuas for the win! (Also my neighbor island Republica Dominicana)

XD sorry merlin but for girls it's suppoused to be "amiga" ha!

Just to tell you, it's suppoused to be "porque no se lo que paso, o porque estoy aqui, no se donde es aqui!"

I guess it might just be me though, but yeah, it's se, not sabe, sabe is only used when talking about another person for example "el no sabe nada" means "he doesn't know anything".

Besides that I'm like here hanging on to ma seat.

I like this fics so much )

Btw, Spanish is my first language and I'm from Puerto Rico! So, love this story so much! Sooo happy to read "Puerto Rico" in a fic *.*

The correct way of the sentence is " De hecho no, porque no sé qué pasó o por qué estoy aquí. Ni siquiera sé dónde es aquí!"

Don't get mad please!, I'm just trying to help to get the words right.

Honestly, your Merlin fanfic is one of the best I've read. The plot is solid. The writing is strong. The OC is likeable and believable. Don't stop writing :)

Pendejo means bitch lmao

Amei essa história você escreve perfeitamente. Espero que faça uma continuação pois amei as aventuras de Arthur e Cassie e é claro, Merlin. Estou muito curiosa sobre o que ela vai fazer para mudar o destino de Arthur na batalha de Camlan e salvar Morgana de ir para o lado negro da força. Parabéns por essa história perfeita!

I actually have an account but I am just too lazy to log in, but I wanted to say you are a wonderful writer, and I hope you never stop writing. This story was wonderful, it pulled on my heart strings from the very beginning, pulling out every emotion a human being can feel but with a natural grace instead of a forced reaction. The next time I log in, this story is so going into my faves. Love your work and hope to see more of it in the future.

Sincerely,
An Adoring Fan

You know after reading chapter 18, I just don't want cassie to leave Camelot. She and Arthur are just wonderful, and Gwen is better off with Lancelot any how. Love the story so far and can't wait to see how it ends. Great work! I'm anxious to read more work from you. *Two thumbs way up* -

Oh god I just finished reading your story and I'm just startled by how much I loved it. I couldn't stop reading like seriously I had never read suck a long story without being a bit bored, but yours was perfect from the beginning to the very end! I totally loved Cassy's character, how strong she is and stuff! Anyway, I just needed to say that you are awesome and this history is awesome and you are my hero annnnd you should totally do a sequel :D! Hope things are going well with college and stuff, bye Holly :D

OMG you should totally do a sequel to this, I will keep updated coz if you do write another one, I want to know!

this was soooooooooooooo sad! i started crying my eyes out!

almost lover is an AMAZING SONG!:)