No no, I owe YOU for bringing this back! I liked it! B's friendship with Scout is adorable tbh. Also I'm still so curious asto what the Spy is gonna do. .

That awkward moment when your brother's name is Adrian.

Sexual content (descriptive) isn't allowed on the site anymore. You might want to wipe out the scenes or tone them down to be less smutty. Just a warning.

Totally worth the waiting. I hope things got better in your personal life.

I see a phenomenal ammount of potential in this story and your writing style. The story is pretty good so far (forgive me, btw, for being too lazy to log in) but I would like to point out a few things I have noticed in order to help you improve.

First of all, there are a lot of typoes that could be avoided by reading through a time or two before posting. Second, the word "mumble" isn't the only action word you can use with your dialogue to signify someone talking low, or beneath their breath. Be careful about using a word too many times, it really dries out your writing. The third thing is missing punctuation, at the end of dialogue and before the closing quotation mark, you need a .,?! Or -.

Also, a fix for that formatting issue is to use :::: or something in word, and then once you've uploaded it, edit the story to put the dividers in, there's a button for it in the editor.

Once again, this story is quite enjoyable so far, and I'll continue reading on. :)

Short, but very sweet. ) I'm just glad we got to hear her say his name, and his reaction.

I also like how the opposite Back Up may be bringing some conflict in after all...

Awwwww cliffhanger! :U PLEASE UPDATE

Soooooooo on the edge of my seat for this cliffhanger. I just love this story. Let me put it this way, this was the fic that made me get a account after lurking so long, just so I could leave a good review. )It's hard to find good TF2 OC fic, and I think this one is a good one.

Your OC isn't an outright Sue that the team NEEDS and worships. The class itself is a bit vague, but it works since a reason was given: B's mom made it for her, only so she could get in. The classes are all pretty well in character, good attention to detail is given. You KNOW TF2. 3 It seems like there's a split in the fandom where fic writers and actual players are almost separate, but you seem to know your stuff. D I'm also always interested in fic interpretations of the respawn system/death/battles/etc.

Sniper...guh, what more can you say about him? 3 I love how you're working his quiet characterization into the relationship. It's a mutal interest in one another and goes into sex, but they keep getting closer. There's no cheesy love confession shouted form mountain tops. I also can't explain why, but I also love the older man/younger woman dynamic going on between the two. The only real criticism I can give at the moment is one another user wrote, to develop the relationship romantically more as well as sexually. It's understandable to be so rushed, given imminent death at any moment, it would just be nice to see more love developing. )

Sorry for my rambling and my gushing, I just wanted to sya how much I loved this. It's rare for a fic to pull me in so far as to read all the chapters in one night. Please continue it, even go all the way to the end? )

Awesome story so far. Hope you keep going :) Id like to know more about the RED sniper, but it up to you :)

Oooo. I love this so much

I'm too much of a fangirl.

dawwwwwww so much lemon lol good job more please!

Ommggg. That was so sweeeeet. :3 update soon!

yo i know i've read the story but 1 thing... can you say something else than 'hummed' just do other ones cause that word is over used too much :/

But other wise... keep um the good work!

Keep them up please its really good :D

Fly on

Fang

Thank yoouuuuu. I love this story so much :3.