This was rather difficult to read.. The story is there but it's like you're words aren't forming pictures.

Basically, I think you're 'telling' the story, but not 'showing' it. I'm viewing the story as if I'm looking through a telescope. What would havr been nice is for the viewer to be 'there' with the story, smack middle when all the action is going.

Huh... how come i only come across this now?

Also... despite being a guy, i do enjoy the occasional FLUFF! and MUSH! It sweeten/suppress my more aggressive side i suppose.

Finally, perhaps you can revisit this story sometime and fix the gender confusions. It'll probably help the quality a little.

And truly, perhaps this will give you another idea to try out with another girl...? One shots like this one are some of my all-time favorite...

This was rather good, poetic, and sometimes waxed philosophical. A little difficult to digest though.

And the word you are looking for is Cliche.

?

Oh you!
You evil person! You!
WHY YOU HAVE TO END IT LIKE THAT?!

Anyways, I don't want to leave it up to my imagination xd

Good story, nonetheless.
On to the next story for me.

The way you wrote this totally feels like it really is the original Ayumi and Keima. The way they think, the things they do, and the way they communicate to one another.

I'm a fan of AyumiXKeima pairing and there are only less than 5 fanfic for them in here so I was really happy when I found this. You really did a great job in writing about them. I hope you make another one about these two.

I love your writing!

Awwwwwwwwwww...AYUMI! This is very sweet. Amazing even. It connects with the characters so accurately that it seems like an accurate result of a "what if" or something. If u read the manga, well... 5/5!

So many hidden gems in the TWGOK segment despite 2 pages of stuffs

Beats 1000 pages of cheesy naruto ANYDAY!

Diabetic inducing indeed, well at least you admit it. Far to sweet and nice and bleh to completely read. Nice to see more fanfiction for this manga though so thats a plus

Xadro

I didn't get the ending... crap.

But it is a great one-shot, well Ayumi is my favorite so this makes it better, I don't know if it is my male hormones or my psyche that finds her so charming, so natural, if any girl is going to end with Keima it must be Ayumi... Great one Wrathie.

(BTW how do i find the novels? I beleive they sell it on your country but in mine there isn't even the manga, sigh.

This is a masterpiece. This story describes perfectly the 'potential' relationship between ayumi and katsuragi. The story was so eloquent, it left me awestruck.

This is the pure unaldultarated diabetes inducing fluff that I have been searching for all this time.

The piece of fiction is pure genius.

There should be a sequel to this, or a side story.

hello!this is my first time reading your fanfics..

and..

and..

and..

I REALLY LIKE, NO, LOVE IT!

your way of writing is sooooo amazing! i wish i can be like you someday. _

*i'll continue reading your stories! You're really a great it up! :DD

It should be "In the World only the Gods and the Girls know, may you find your own story as well." instead of "In the World where only the Gods and the Girls know, may you find your own story as well."

Otherwise, good oneshot!

Can't beleive I missed this when It was published. I did vote for Ayumi (and one more).

Diabetic inducing? Maybe, but great. Ayumi's inner monologues are great and go perfectly with her personality.

I do know this is one of many posibilities, but I kept wondering what would Ayumi think about Keima's contract with hell and his task. If Elsie is still around it means they still have those collar weightening their lives.

I would have liked to see more reaction from their classmates. I know it was mentioned, but I would have liked to see it more (like in the manga where everyone is cross at Keima because Kanon confessed to him in front of everyone)

Great job.